Reviewer: Raven Knight Signed
Chapter 9: Chapter 9
Plaid, oh my...GUH! Okay...I'm not even sure what to say about this chapter except for some poorly organized flailing, so here goes:
LOVE THE OPENING SCENE with McCoy, especially his daydreaming about his childhood home with the peach tree - this memory made even better with his father promising to introduce him to a mint julep when he's older. Other than the opening scene's use of McCoy, he was just so excellently utilized in this chapter. (You know I get particularly excited and happy when his character is written well with some depth and heart, and ugh! Nailed both of those with him for this chapter!)
Really enjoyed the introspection going on for both Kirk and Spock. Spock realizing the irony of him seeking answers in his emotions while Kirk sought them through logic was so well put and upon that realization for Spock, you can completely see how he doesn't quite know what to say during that conversation. Also, enjoyed that Kirk's conversation with Rand was just what he needed to learn about himself in order to face their situation a little calmer than what had haunted him since their last conversation. His "please be happy" punched me in the gut. (Not going to go off on personal anecdotes in your review section, but if you are ever curious, I'd be willing to share with you. Nothing too exciting or profound, but that moment definitely hit a nerve for me with its accuracy to reality. So, well done, there!)
Speaking of Rand! Adore where you are going with her. Thank you for fleshing her character out. She absolutely deserved better. Glad she is getting that with this narrative.
Lastly, coming back to their respective introspective sections. Excellent use on the repeated line about, " a billion dreams, a billion hopes, a billion promises cast out like messages in bottles." Good parallel with how, while they may approach something differently, the two of them do tend to somewhat think alike in the end. I very much enjoyed Spock's introspection, trying to meditate, not wanting to be in his quarters, yet they were the only completely private place, and the realization that he was only running away from the situation. I think, like the "be happy" moment with Kirk, Spock's entire thought process and trying to cope struck something in me with this chapter. While I was glad Kirk came to have a discussion with Spock here, I totally understood how Spock was not precisely ready to handle that conversation either yet. I could be wrong with how I read this chapter, and if so, I apologize, and it could be me misinterpretting some sections. If I'm way off, so sorry.
Regardless, it doesn't change the fact that...GUH! It's SO GOOD! You write so concisely that it makes me jealous, I admit. So good, Plaid. I know you were having trouble with this one, but I think it came out splendidly. Keep up the good work. ~ RKAuthor's Response:
Raven!! omg thank you so much for reading and commenting!!! I'm so happy that you like the characterizations! And your interpretation of what happened was exactly what I was envisioning, so I'm really glad it came across. =) I really appreciate your words and encouragement! <3333