Reviewer: Pookie Signed
Date: 10/22/2018
Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 33
OMG! I love this story. At first I thought it was moving way too slow, but at this point, I appreciate the time I tv took to get here. I love the dynamics of the characters..all familiar but different. I dread and look forward to the fall out that is sure to happen when Jim takes the Maru!
Author's Response:
Hi, Pookie,
Thank you for your lovely comment. I’m thrilled that you love the story. I love how you find the characters familiar yet different. That’s kind of what I wanted to achieve.
I think you make an excellent point regarding pacing. I suspect it is a little slow, and probably over the whole fic a good 40,000 words could have been gutted. However, as a complete newbie to fanfiction, or indeed, any fiction, I wasn’t aware of stuff like structure, pacing, plot points etc. I just started writing with no real clue as to what the hell I was doing. It hasn’t helped that I’m a slow writer (been writing this since 2012), resulting in my having more than one beta (and now none), which has meant that issues like pacing haven’t been caught. Definitely not the betas fault, I hasten to add.
Since, I started writing this, I’ve learnt a lot more in theory about ‘how to write’ (pacing, plot etc.), but alas it’s now way too late for this fic. I’m certainly not going to start again and re-write it, so it’ll have to stand as it is, a story written by a novice for enjoyment. If I ever get better, then at least I’ll be able to measure my progress against this one. But, if you and others are getting enjoyment out of reading it, then that's all that matters.
Ah, the Maru. Yes, Jim does have a self-destructive streak. We will find out soon. I only hope I can do the fall-out justice (especially with no beta to give it a once over).
Thanks again for taking the time to read and review. It's really helpful to receive feedback, and much appreciated.
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