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A Different Corner by DeeGilles Rated: ADULT (NC-17) starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 203]
Summary:

Call it an AU or maybe just a "What If?".  What if Spock gets promoted off the Enterprise in the midst of the first five-year mission?

(The Road Not Taken #1)


Categories: Fiction
Characters: Amanda, Carol Marcus, Chekov, Lori Ciani, McCoy, Original Character(s), Sarek, Scott, Uhura
Crossover Fandom: None
Genres: Kirk/Spock Slash
Other Languages: None
Specific movie: None
Story Type: Action/Plot, Angst, Character Study, Erotica, Established Relationship, Romance
Trope (OPTIONAL): Bottom Spock, Hurt Kirk, Hurt Spock
Universe: ST:TOS Original Universe
Warnings: None
Series: The Road Not Taken
Chapters: 38 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 89459 Read Count: 95175
[Report This] Published: 07/30/2013 Updated: 10/30/2013
Reviewer: Alfalfa Signed
Date: 08/26/2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Just dropping a note to say I'm enjoying your story and appreciating the frequent updates :)

Reviewer: Alfalfa Signed
Date: 09/27/2013 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

Very nice flashback to Kirk and Spock's first coming together.   Interesting dynamics with McCoy's coming to the rescue.   An unusual take on Kirk's promotion, though I'm not sure how I feel about Spock's... umm... reticence.   Since things aren't exactly peachy at the moment, Lori's entrance can only add complications.  Still appreciating the frequent updates :)

Prayer by miloowen Rated: ADULT (NC-17) starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 6]
Summary:

A poem.


Categories: Poetry
Characters: None
Crossover Fandom: None
Genres: Kirk/Spock Slash
Other Languages: None
Specific movie: None
Story Type: Character Study
Trope (OPTIONAL): None
Universe: ST:TOS Original Universe
Warnings: Caveat lector/Choose Not to Warn
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 160 Read Count: 537
[Report This] Published: 09/06/2013 Updated: 09/06/2013
Reviewer: Alfalfa Signed
Date: 09/06/2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Very moving and apt.  Wonderful work.



Author's Response:

Thank you.

Protector of Logic by Farfalla Rated: ADULT (NC-17) starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 10]
Summary:

Spock isn't going to the Enterprise's costume party because he doesn't think it's logcal, but Kirk wins him over with logic by pointing out that his own Alexander the Great costume isn't complete without a Hephaestion. And then Kirk's costume turns out to be even skimpier than Spock was expecting! Written in a Don Pablo's restaurant, and the story turned out so hot that the restaurant was later torn down completely and a new one built in its place -- a new one called BJ's. Go figure.


Categories: Fiction
Characters: Chekov, McCoy, Scott, Uhura
Crossover Fandom: None
Genres: Kirk/Spock Slash
Other Languages: None
Specific movie: None
Story Type: Erotica, First Time, Fluff, Romance
Trope (OPTIONAL): None
Universe: ST:TOS Original Universe
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3435 Read Count: 2064
[Report This] Published: 09/07/2013 Updated: 09/07/2013
Reviewer: Alfalfa Signed
Date: 09/08/2013 Title: Chapter 1: Protector of Logic

I love this.  I love all Farfalla stories, although the Valeris one made me scream with her.   Thank you for posting.   And thank you for thyla.com as wel!  :)

 

Favorite part:

Logic had won again. He now had a perfectly logical reason to attend the masquerade. Of course the Vulcan way was best! “I shall be honored to attend as your consort,” Spock acquiesced, “if I am permitted to wear a more modest costume.”

 

Of course.  I like the narrator voice, the way you're gently teasing the Vulcan...  like an affectionate cousin or aunt who knows when Spock needs a nudge.    



Author's Response:

Very much thank you. :) For all of that!

Pandora's Bowl by Suzan Lovett Rated: All Audiences [Reviews - 1]
Summary:

Cadet Kirk is having a good time at a Starfleet Academy banquet, despite the presence of the “grog bowl” – with every vile, if technically edible substance any passerby feels like adding to its evil contents, and traditionally used to punish the violator of even the smallest infraction of protocol.  But then things start to go a little bit too far...

Originally published in December, 1985, in the print fanzine “Trekism at Length” # 5.


Categories: Fiction
Characters: None
Crossover Fandom: None
Genres: Kirk-Spock Friendship
Other Languages: None
Specific movie: None
Story Type: Character Study
Trope (OPTIONAL): None
Universe: ST:TOS Original Universe
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 6255 Read Count: 4727
[Report This] Published: 09/08/2013 Updated: 09/08/2013
Reviewer: Alfalfa Signed
Date: 09/09/2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was great, the vivid descriptions, the atmosphere, the tension build up, the young Kirk slowly working up a head of steam... enough to take on a big boss in the name of justice.   I like the conversation between Kirk and Spock at the railing as well, Kirk having to rephrase his wishes, saying I want to play chess with you rather than I want to play chess with an alien.    It's nice to see that Spock also had a tendency to buck the brass in his own logical, passive-aggressive way--they are a matched set, those two.  :)   I really admire stories that portray a young Kirk and Spock convincingly.   Thank you for posting.

Freedom of Expression by Farfalla Rated: All Audiences starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 5]
Summary: Spock believes in 'show, don't tell'
Categories: Ficlets
Characters: None
Crossover Fandom: None
Genres: Kirk/Spock Slash
Other Languages: None
Specific movie: None
Story Type: Angst, Romance
Trope (OPTIONAL): None
Universe: ST:TOS Original Universe
Warnings: Major character death
Series: Bill of Rights K/S Drabbles
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 99 Read Count: 3259
[Report This] Published: 09/09/2013 Updated: 09/09/2013
Reviewer: Alfalfa Signed
Date: 09/10/2013 Title: Chapter 1: Freedom of Expression

You really pack a wallop into this short piece. 

 

This is Kirk's voice--true, so true.   For me, it would have worked even without the 'decade of marriage.'  It would still make a good come back for people who say there's no evidence Kirk and Spock ever did the deed so slash fans must be imagining things :)

 

I think I read this on Trekiverse but thank you for bringing more of your work here.  

Storm by Anna S Greener Rated: ADULT (NC-17) starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 13]
Summary:

Kirk wakes up in Sick Bay eight days after having been attacked while on Shore Leave, however neither McCoy nor Spock will tell him the consequences of what was done to him.

Originally published in 2007 in the print fanzine Legacy # 4.


Categories: Fiction
Characters: None
Crossover Fandom: None
Genres: Kirk/Spock Slash
Other Languages: None
Specific movie: None
Story Type: First Time
Trope (OPTIONAL): None
Universe: ST:TOS Original Universe
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 49210 Read Count: 8822
[Report This] Published: 09/12/2013 Updated: 09/12/2013
Reviewer: Alfalfa Signed
Date: 09/13/2013 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Such a compelling backstory for Kirk, his family situation.  Kirk's Mom in particular moved me.   This piece of dialogue will stay with me--so heartbreaking and vivid.  

“I want to go back. Out there,” she says. “The stars took your father from me, but I still want to go back to them. That’s horrible of me, it’s unforgivable. But I can’t help it. When I close my eyes I should see your father’s face. Instead I see the stars shining—not the way they do here, on Earth, but the way they do out in deep space, like a million sharp, clear eyes.”

Kirk is definitely his mother's son.  You managed to blend the unique background of Gray Gram and Kirk's spacefaring parents with the Tarsus canon and made all these pieces fit Storm's Kirk.   The conversation where Kirk defended his Gray Gram to McCoy was effective and touching.  Perhaps this is a minor point, but I also find it believable that T'Pring at first tried to help Spock, before their relationship degenerated into something rancorous.  

The dream with Kirk and Spock at Academy moved me (yes, I know I keep saying 'moved' over and over... ;)    Spock's praising Kirk's 'supreme arrogance' and pledging his support in Kirk's bid to restore the world to Kirk's vision of how it should be...  just the right amount of intimacy-- it would be so easy to give young Kirk and Spock too much early ardor...  That this dream should be Kirk's creation, because unlike his dreams with Gray Gram this Academy scene couldn't have been real, made it extra poignant to me.  

Kirk's dreams were very effective, particularly in the sequence you chose, culminating in the dream where Kirk figured out how to keep both himself and Spock alive during Spock's plaktow... so powerful.  

The conversation where Spock first called Kirk 't'hy'la'...  I'm tempted to quote the entire thing, but then I'd have no space for my rant about how wonderful your dialogue is--so true to the characters, so insightful... the resolution (of that conv.) is neither too easily reached nor too convoluted, just enough of a tug on the heart to be gratifying, to feel like the characters broke through the impasse.   And the return of humor... 'we do make better better decisions as a team, no matter what the tactical situation.'   After the unrelenting tension of the Shaper then Gol, a welcome respite--very apt handling of the tension and suspense throughout. 

Thank you for this.    Please consider posting even more of your wonderful writing online :)

Omega and Alpha by K Chaps Rated: ADULT (NC-17) starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 6]
Summary:

Still mourning the death of Gary Mitchell, Kirk must learn to deal with Spock as his new first officer, while continuing on a personal quest at the same time.


Previously published in 2006 in the print fanzine “T’hy’la” # 26.


Categories: Fiction
Characters: None
Crossover Fandom: None
Genres: Kirk/Spock Slash
Other Languages: None
Specific movie: None
Story Type: First Time
Trope (OPTIONAL): None
Universe: ST:TOS Original Universe
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 24405 Read Count: 4383
[Report This] Published: 09/14/2013 Updated: 09/14/2013
Reviewer: Alfalfa Signed
Date: 09/15/2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wonderful--for me this story had the perfect scale and scope.   Good plot, pacing, tension.    Gradual, convincing development of Kirk and Spock's relationship.  I especially like the way the intimacy was gently conveyed--snuck up on Kirk and Spock, quietly acknowledged by each in his own way.    I like the way McCoy gently aided them, his relationship with Kirk and Spock too.   Thank you--I'm really glad to see this story posted to the archive.  

A Far, Far Better Thing by museaway Rated: Mature Content (Teen) starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 10]
Summary:

Gol had not bested him; surely selecting a gift for Jim would not.


Categories: Fiction
Characters: None
Crossover Fandom: None
Genres: Kirk/Spock Slash
Other Languages: None
Specific movie: None
Story Type: Established Relationship
Trope (OPTIONAL): None
Universe: ST:TOS Original Universe
Warnings: None
Series: Phoenix
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2934 Read Count: 2974
[Report This] Published: 09/15/2013 Updated: 09/15/2013
Reviewer: Alfalfa Signed
Date: 09/16/2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was a wonderful read.   Your details are so rich and poignant, for example:  

He had accompanied Jim here before, Spock's breath catching as he watched Jim touch each book in the approximation of a Vulcan kiss along its spine.

 

Really nice.   I must confess when I first reached the end I wished there was still more to read, but I think Spock's remembering the dusty store effectively closed the circle.   And this was so beautiful that I don't feel the lack of a hot sex scene.   There's enough sensuous details, depth of emotions right here, indeed.

 

Jim's laughter was beautiful like music as his lips brushed Spock's cheek and meld points and the tip of his ear. His lips were warm. Spock knew them, knew this. He lifted his chin to feel Jim's mouth press against his. The last of the tension eased, and he boldly kissed Jim in return. The universe shrunk to the two of them. Spock lost all sense of time, but he found it did not matter with Jim curled around him.

From the corner of his eye, Spock felt something wet slip down his cheek. 

The Old Man by T nash-veh Rated: Mature Content (Teen) starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 10]
Summary:

This is dark, and a story that drove itself onto the page with great determination.  I knew my husband would be mad that I hadn’t gone to the store as I’d intended, but the story would not wait.  It’s not my story.  It has its own life, and insisted itself into being.  It didn’t explain which universe it was from, or whether Jim has blue eyes or brown.  I see the original series characters in this, but I leave it to the reader to decide.

In some ways it is humorless because there is no softening of reality.  There is the misery of old age, and forgetfulness, and the anger that surely comes with all of that.  And yet this IS Jim Kirk.  He would find humor in life, even if he can find it only at his own expense.  Read this at your own risk.  It stops short – just barely – of character death.  But Spock is there, so at least, at least Jim has that.  If you look hard, there is a tiny bit of fluff and humor – but there is much, much more angst.

Warning – for the final time – don’t read this if you want something light and fluffy.


Categories: Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Crossover Fandom: None
Genres: Kirk-Spock Friendship, Kirk/Spock Pre-Slash, Kirk/Spock Slash
Other Languages: None
Specific movie: None
Story Type: Angst, Character Study, Established Relationship, Fluff, Humor, Hurt/Comfort
Trope (OPTIONAL): Hurt Kirk, Hurt Spock
Universe: Abrams Universe, AU Alternate Universe, ST:TOS Original Universe
Warnings: Infidelity
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4220 Read Count: 1418
[Report This] Published: 09/16/2013 Updated: 09/16/2013
Reviewer: Alfalfa Signed
Date: 09/17/2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This is the second dying Jim story I've read within the hour, so I was already verklempt before I dove in, but yours is also a well-written story, worth the heartache.   I laughed (a relief from angst and tears) to see Jim was still bossy at the end, insisting Spock had promised to obey him.   Once the Captain, always the Captain  :)   



Author's Response:

Ah, yes.  Dear bossy Jim.  Thank you so much for the review.  I'm happy there was a little pleasure to be had amongst the pain.

Crying How Bright by eimeo Rated: Mature Content (Teen) starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 10]
Summary:

Published in "Legends" #7 (Editor: Dovya Blacque), 2012.

I’m still James Kirk, whatever else changes. Everything else changes in the end.

Facing retirement, an aging Kirk wonders what the future holds for him. 


Categories: Fiction
Characters: None
Crossover Fandom: None
Genres: Kirk/Spock Slash
Other Languages: None
Specific movie: None
Story Type: Character Study, Established Relationship
Trope (OPTIONAL): None
Universe: ST:TOS Original Universe
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3403 Read Count: 1366
[Report This] Published: 05/09/2014 Updated: 05/09/2014
Reviewer: Alfalfa Signed
Date: 05/10/2014 Title: Chapter 1: Crying How Bright

 

Another beautiful Eimeo story.    The unusual point of view you chose was deftly handled and quite effective.    All along the story had a sense of foreboding, but I still hoped to the last that you weren't going for the 'Generations' ending.   In fact, in my own head I'm going to pretend you didn't go there--after all, Kirk and Spock's being bondmates wasn't on the big screen either, so I'm going to pretend their bonding skewed the timelines and Kirk returned to help Spock furnish the house in Regar.

 

As usual, you capture Kirk's voice very well:

<<You see, you closed the door on that chapter of our life and you, in your infinite logic, are not given to these Human fits of nostalgia; you feel no need to look back to make sure. All I can tell you is that the years stretch out ahead of me as a man I don’t quite know and his skin fits poorly on my bones. If I don’t say goodbye to myself today, I’m not sure how I can start to be this other man. And I can’t find any way to say this to you that I think you’ll understand.>>

 

 

Still, Kirk kept his endearing sense of humor:

<<“I like Regar,” I say. “If you’re going to be away for months at a time, I’d like to think I’ll be able to see the occasional pair of Human ears to keep me company.”>>

 

 

 

This was very tender and poignant:

<<For this, I will risk your wrath and muss your hair and I know you will allow me to do so, today, because you are worried that the man you get back won’t be the man you sent out. >>

 

 

This gives me the sense of two lifelong partners growing to fit each other:

<<You also know an evasion when you hear one. You incline your head but your eyes let me know that you’re humoring me.>>

 

 

This was profound and wise, and it captured so well the compromises couples in love make, how we all sign up for inevitable heartbreak in order to snatch love while we still can:

<<So, yes, I know an evasion when I hear one, but I didn’t press it because I knew even then that the reason you didn’t answer was because there were no words for how bad it would be, and that it caused you pain to think of it. In those empty days without you, I knew loss and loneliness and a desolation that I thought might actually eat a hole in my belly, but the severed bond was only a little throbbing pain underneath the larger, human ocean of grief. If it will be worse than that for you, then I don’t want to know either.>>

 

This was so sweet--- I admit the eggs took me a moment to process before I remembered ovo-vegetarians-- but I especially love 'your nest of blankets', the romantic image of Kirk's bringing Spock breakfast in bed.   I like how Kirk already envisions himself pointedly ignoring Spock's protectiveness...   some things never change  :)

 

<<Perhaps we’ll go away first—back to Iowa, to Peter on the farm. Or to the mountains, to my uncle’s cabin. It will be just settling into winter there and you’ll wear four layers of clothing and your skin will still be flushed green with the chill; I’ll cook eggs in the kitchen that looks out over the valley and bring them to you in bed so that you don’t have to leave your nest of blankets. I will ride horses and you will watch and your anxiety will be a shrill whine in my skull and I will ignore it, the way you will ignore the amusement it engenders in response. We’ll remember all the days that have made us who we are, and, wrapped in memories, we’ll take our leave of this planet where I learned to be one man, and on another planet I’ll learn to be a man who sits quietly in an empty house and remembers other times.>>

 

The end of this quoted piece is so perfectly phrased, although it also puts me in the mind of all those stories/movies where one character says something like, 'when I return let's go to Paris'.... usually a clue that character uttering those words won't return...

 

May I be permitted the liberty of asking when your *happy* zine story will be shared online?    I heard a rumor that you'd written one...   :)



Author's Response:

Oooooh I LOVE LOVE LOVE getting big, detailed reviews like this, thank you so much! Yeeeeah, I tend to just ignore Generations-canon, if I'm honest; Nexus!Kirk is so OOC (yeah, of course he's going to refuse to help the galaxy because he wants to get laid. Yeah, that sounds just like Kirk *headdesk*) and way to completely invalidate the key central theme of WOK by having Kirk retire from Starfleet before he ever starts waxing philosophical about aging and redundancy and his place in the universe. It irritates me on many, many levels (though the Enterprise crash is all kinds of cool, so I'll let that bit slide). So you can definitely pick and choose what you think happens next after this fic finishes; we know he's going to retire soon anyway because of STVI, so please feel free to read it alongside that if you like! 

Never really considered the eggs bit, but I guess I've never seen Spock as fully vegan, just vegetarian (though I think he'd be on board with the no-leather thing, because leather involves killing a sentient being; in fact, there's a throwaway reference to that coming up in my WiP *first shameless plug of author's response*). It is, I'm not too proud to admit, by way of being another two fingers up to Generations (yeah, I really, really don't like that movie; does it show? :-D) where he's found cooking eggs for Antonia, and just NO, all my NO, so I'm reclaiming that bit for Spock.

*Second shameless plug of author's response* YES! My happy fic! I can totally do these too! Assignment: Albion, the new zine from Isis Press, will be available to purchase later this year, featuring the unapologetically cracky "Faint Praise" by eimeo, in which she proves to herself that not everything she writes must be angsty. I'm not sure when I'll be able to put it up on line; I'll check with TLara, but zine fics are usually embargoed for at least 12 months after publication, I think. 

In The Zone by PaintedBird Rated: All Audiences starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 151]
Summary:

In this A/U, there is no United Federation of Planets. Starfleet is an Earth protection agency, and the only aliens unfortunate enough to have met Earthers were a small group of Vulcans fleeing war-ravaged Vulcan to follow the beliefs of Surak in peace.  Shot down and herded onto a marginal piece of Earth, the Vulcans have barely managed to survive their Terran experience, and there appears to be only a limited future for young Spock.  Life does not hold much more for Jim Kirk who is drifting through life, aimless and purposeless.  Is it posiblee for two such different beings to find their true calling and make a difference?  If their love is meant to be, can they find one another? 


Categories: Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Crossover Fandom: AU or Mirror Universe
Genres: Kirk/Spock Pre-Slash
Other Languages: None
Specific movie: None
Story Type: Action/Plot
Trope (OPTIONAL): None
Universe: ST:TOS Original Universe
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 58 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 200371 Read Count: 360942
[Report This] Published: 07/22/2014 Updated: 07/25/2015
Reviewer: Alfalfa Signed
Date: 07/31/2015 Title: Chapter 58: Chapter 58

Apologies for the late review--I read the end in a huge burst and was very pleased with your work, but was too busy to review sooner.  I must say you truly saved the best for last!   Really love the way you portrayed Spock's relationship with T'Lira and infant Amanda and newborn Solkan.  How nice for Pike to marry Jim and Spock in the human style.  Very realistic touch, too, your depiction of Dighton and the challenges Spock is expected to face at the Academy.  You even had a surprise in store, with Sarek turning up--and how fitting that Sarek should negotiate on behalf of the Vulcans and be on hand for the birth of his grandson!   Come to think of it you kind of foreshadowed Sarek's appearance when Amanda and Jim had that talk after she took him away from the delivery room, but I still didn't see it coming!   Probably the most enjoyable thing for me is how you portrayed Spock integrity, his honoring his commitments--very true to TOS, even though he's of course younger in this AU story.    

 

I understand you have other projects in mind, but I've immensely enjoyed this story and would be pleased to have more glimpses from this universe if the mood strikes you.  



Author's Response:

I am glad that you liked the conclusion of this lengthy work.  I hope I was able to draw all the loose threads together.  At some point, I will be back (probably sooner rather than later) with some more work, but fo the moment I have work to do on my house and yard, need to finish some very overdue commitments, and do some reading for myself.  Should I have a good idea to continue this story as a series I will do so, but it would have to be an excellent idea.  Thanks for committing your time to read all these months and for your kind comments.

Reviewer: Alfalfa Signed
Date: 07/17/2015 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53

Yes, I am smiling, have been for a while now   :)    However I dare not get too comfortable while reading any story that's in progress.

 

Sorry I haven't had a chance to review more often, but every update gave me a little thrill of anticipation (and nervousness).   Really glad to see T'Lira and baby Amanda at Spock and Jim's bonding / wedding.    Amanda must have been thrilled to learn of her grandbaby's name, lol.  Pike officiating was a nice touch.  

 

In earlier less happy chapters, you came up with a clever solution for Jim to suggest to Pike when Spock was running from the mob, and the solution Pike came up with gave me fond memories of TOS.  

 

When you reach the end of this story it will be a bittersweet moment for fans like me who've waited for each installment.   Hopefully you'll occasionally favor us with an epilogue or 'missing scene', perhaps of Ray and Amanda meeting up with T'Lira and baby Amanda for the first time.   I wonder if Spock was present to do the introductions?    :)

 

Thanks again for all your hard work.



Author's Response:

Hello again!  Always good to hear from you.  I appreciate any comments, but don't feel obligated in any way.  There are just a few more chapters as the story is complete in draft and my goal is to finish this month.  At this time, I have no further plans with this work, but who knows?  My plan for the moment is to work on non-slash projects, but I am certain I will be back at some point.  I have stories I have written and have not posted so I'll be around in some form.  Thanks for sticking with this very long WIP and for making comments.  It's good to know what people are thinking.

Reviewer: Alfalfa Signed
Date: 06/19/2015 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48

Loving the recent chapters.   Very good dialogue in the conversations between Spock and Amanda.  I also thought Jim's declaration that he would want Spock even if he had to go back to that Iowa farm he worked so hard to get away from both romantic and heartfelt.   I did wonder what would happen if those in charge decided to imprison Spock, how that would affect his bond with Jim, but I never understood the charges against Spock in the first place.   Jim has shown such patience--very impressive in a guy with youthful libido.   I like the way he stood up for Spock at the meetings with the admirals.    

I'm especially looking forward to the scenes of Jim and Spock in Charleston with Amanda and Ray.  I'm hoping it won't be as dire as Spock projected--very thoughtful of Spock to worry about Amanda and Ray's safety.   Very gutsy of Spock (if not terribly diplomatic) to address Daystrom's prejudice so bluntly.   It was also clever of you to have Spock replicate enough of the previous design to show it was his own work before veering off on this improved, modified design, to answer questions about whether the system Starfleet found was built by Spock.

Thank you for all your hard work on this interesting story.   I may not always have the chance to review promptly but I'm always looking forward to more.



Author's Response:

Thanks for your remarks.  I guess I should have worked a little harder to make the charges clearer if you dind't understand them.  Basically, he was accused of stealind or copying Starfleet secrets which clearly he didn't do.  As far as Spock's lack of diplomacy with Daystrom, he is a young Vulcan and accustomed to telling the truth, even if it is not diplomatic - or at least that is how I see him at this point.  I think he will learn to be a bit more diplomatic as he understands humans a bit better.  

I think you'll like some of the upcoming chapters.  At least I hope you do.  Don't worry about responding to each chapter though.  I really do appreciate your reviews and the others because they let me know what is working and what is not.  You weren't clear about the charges and another reviewer had an issue with language.  That is useful to me in future work which is one reason I always ask for comments.  Without that, I don't grow as a writer.  

There is more to come.  I hope you continue to enjoy it.

Reviewer: Alfalfa Signed
Date: 05/30/2015 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter 45

I really like the way you're writing Amanda in this story.   It's interesting to consider that she spent those years resenting Spock when he wasn't around to be hurt by her anger.   Though he grew up without a mother, he was also spared the bullying he'd likely face if it were widely known his mother was human...

 

You mention you're nearing the end... thank you for all your hard work on this story.   I hope it's permissible for me to say I hope there'll still be scenes / epilogues (if not further chapters of this story) depicting Spock's Starfleet Academy life, his adventures in space with Jim, how Jim and Spock deal with T'Lira's insistence on raising Spock's children far from him, etc.  Thanks again.



Author's Response:

Although it seems a bit contradictory, I have found that it is sometimes easier to dislike a person that you do not know or do not know well whereas if you are facing that person, looking into his or her eyes it is easier to see the total person, not just what you are finding annoying or unacceptable.  I think that Amanda is a very loving person by nature (after all, she did fall in love with a Vulcan!) but just got way over her head with that relationship and that baby.  Now her true, loving nature can express herself.  What do you think?

As for being near the end, I probably should have said that we are closer to the end than the beginning, given that I have 7 more chapters in draft and am not finished.  I do intend to bring to resolution some of the issues you mentioned, but having spent almost a year on this project I do not know how extensive those resolutions will be.  Whatever it is, do know that I appreciate your comments and thanks.  I have loved Trek for a long time and am happiest when I am able to give to fellow fans who love it as much as I do.  Thanks!

Reviewer: Alfalfa Signed
Date: 05/13/2015 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42

I'm reading with great interest, and looking forward to the collaboration between Jim, Spock and Scotty.    Thank you for writing and sharing this story.



Author's Response:

I hope you will like the upcoming chapters with Jm, Spock, and Scotty.  I've added a bit of humor and I'll be interested in seeing how it goes over.  Thanks for your comments.  While I really do appreciate the interest that Zone is generating and the numbers of people who are reading, it is also very satisfying to hear from a human being now and then.  Thanks!

Hope Springs Eternal by RowanBaines Rated: All Audiences starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 9]
Summary:

They came from the stars. Maybe one day they shall return to the stars, leaving behind the ramshackle dwelling near the cliffs that has been their home.


Categories: Ficlets
Characters: None
Crossover Fandom: None
Genres: Kirk/Spock Slash
Other Languages: None
Specific movie: None
Story Type: Angst
Trope (OPTIONAL): None
Universe: ST:TOS Original Universe
Warnings: Caveat lector/Choose Not to Warn
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 455 Read Count: 4166
[Report This] Published: 08/04/2015 Updated: 08/04/2015
Reviewer: Alfalfa Signed
Date: 08/05/2015 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This is sweet but very sad.   I didn't quite know what to say when I read it, so I think I probably left an anonymous kudos, because it was just too far toward the bitter end of bittersweet for me.   I didn't want to speculate about what Spock was doing out there all alone and why Jim was so displeased to find him there.

 

I read this on ao3 and always meant to go back to revisit the picture--didn't you have a picture linked to it at one point?  Do you have a more direct link--to that particular entry?   I ask because tumblr tends to make my browser turn into the perpetual spinning beach ball.

 

Thanks for creating and sharing  :)



Author's Response:

I definitely meant to give a sense of hope at the end. But yes, I can understand your reaction to the more meloncholy aspects of the story. I think I broke my own heart a little while writing it!

I am terribly confused right now because I could swear that I made art for this and posted it with the ficlet, but upon scouring my archive for the link I can't find it! I honestly can't remember for certain if I posted a link with the story at some point, but I know I made art for this. If I manage to come across it I'll send you a message with the link. =)

Thank you for reading and commenting!