Penname: bemusedfox [Contact] Real name: j.k.
Member Since: 05/23/2013
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Pain and pleasure by Bedwench, WightSpirit Rated: ADULT (NC-17) starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 9]
Summary:

After the dramatic events on Ekos Kirk reflects on the nature of his sexuality and wonders if Spock will be able to deal with some of his more perverse pleasures. Spock as it turns out has a few surprises up his sleeve. This is a stand alone story but it does follow on from Once more with feeling.


Categories: Fiction
Characters: None
Crossover Fandom: None
Genres: Kirk/Spock Slash
Other Languages: None
Specific movie: None
Story Type: Character Study
Trope (OPTIONAL): None
Universe: ST:TOS Original Universe
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 4079 Read Count: 3408
[Report This] Published: 05/11/2013 Updated: 05/11/2013
Reviewer: bemusedfox Signed
Date: 05/23/2013 Title: Chapter 1: Your pain, my pleasure

This is a good story! I like the idea that Jim is able to get some sexual satisfaction (though not enough pleasure) from the whipping! I also like that Spock is not only willing to acquiesce to Jim's Kink, but to actively particpate and enoy it.

As for constructive criticism, I would suggest trying to use less sesquipedalians in your writing as it tends to clog the flow of your story, and also at times makes it seem as though you were using a thesaurus as you were writing. Especially since sometimes you use words that might not mean quite what you are trying to say. Such as "responding with enthusiasm to the pheromonal emissions of his proximal mate." "Proximal" implies that Jim has multiple mates and Spock just happens to be the one closest to him, which, of course, is contradicted by the fact that Jim does not want to commit infidelity even though it would get them out of prison safely.

Big words are awesome, but using them just to use them hinders your writing.

However, overall, you have a very good writing style with a solid grasp on grammar, and are miles above the majority of internet authors. Your plot moves along nicely and you ablely weaved the flashback into the story.



Author's Response:

Hi I thought I responded to tumour really thoughtful and thought provoking review so apologies, I must have typed it and deleted! Thank you for your comments, encouraging, and helpful. I really appreciate your thoughts. Words fascinate me but I admit sometimes I decide what I think a word ought to mean and thes forget that. I might be off message! 

 

regards 

 

Liz.

Good boy by Cyberrat Rated: ADULT (NC-17) starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 24]
Summary:

Prequel to 'Good master'

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Could you resist him, when he crawls towards you and just... curls around your legs? Spock definitely can not.

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PWP (Sort of... there IS a story as to how it happened)

PuppyPlay!Kink; loving Domination/submission


Categories: Fiction
Characters: None
Crossover Fandom: None
Genres: Kirk/Spock Slash
Other Languages: None
Specific movie: None
Story Type: Character Study, Erotica, Established Relationship, First Time, Fluff, Hurt/Comfort, Romance
Trope (OPTIONAL): Bottom Kirk, Bottom Spock, Hurt Kirk
Universe: ST:TOS Original Universe
Warnings: Dominance/submission, Kink
Series: Caring
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 7786 Read Count: 6466
[Report This] Published: 05/24/2013 Updated: 05/24/2013
Reviewer: bemusedfox Signed
Date: 05/25/2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Please write a sequel! or one from jim's point of view! or even better, both!



Author's Response:

heyyy, thanks for the review^^

:D I actually thought about it. I'll see, what I can do. But it'll take a little while, before I tackle it, I think :)

Good master by Cyberrat Rated: ADULT (NC-17) starstarstarstar [Reviews - 11]
Summary:

Sequel to 'Good boy'.

You do not need to have read the prequel, though it probably would be better :)

It's Jim's birthday and he gets gifts from Spock...

Jim's POV, because a few expressed their interest in it

Warnings: PuppyPlay!Kink. Loving Dominance/submission


Categories: Fiction
Characters: None
Crossover Fandom: None
Genres: Kirk/Spock Slash
Other Languages: None
Specific movie: None
Story Type: Character Study, Erotica, Established Relationship, Fluff, Hurt/Comfort, Romance
Trope (OPTIONAL): None
Universe: ST:TOS Original Universe
Warnings: Dominance/submission, Kink
Series: Caring
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 6814 Read Count: 4007
[Report This] Published: 07/06/2013 Updated: 07/06/2013
Reviewer: bemusedfox Signed
Date: 07/06/2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Unh! That was amazing! More, please! I love your writing, both in this and your other stories!



Author's Response:

hey, thanks for the review :)

hnngh so happy you like what I'm coming up with <3 always makes my day to hear something like that :D

Ni'Var by Werewolvesarereal Rated: All Audiences starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 12]
Summary:

Humans have daemons. Vulcans have katras. And Spock, born of both, has neither. Which he's fine with. Really. Meanwhile, James Kirk is a little curious about this whole daemon business, because how on earth can he have two souls - ?


Categories: Fiction
Characters: Amanda, Chris Pike, Gary Mitchell, McCoy, Sarek, T'Pring
Crossover Fandom: None
Genres: Kirk/Spock Pre-Slash, Kirk/Spock Slash
Other Languages: None
Specific movie: None
Story Type: Angst, Character Study, Romance
Trope (OPTIONAL): Hurt Spock
Universe: AU Alternate Universe, Crossover, ST:TOS Original Universe
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 11177 Read Count: 7809
[Report This] Published: 07/15/2013 Updated: 07/15/2013
Reviewer: bemusedfox Signed
Date: 07/15/2013 Title: Chapter 1: Ni'Var

This was very well written! I loved it! Is that story about the princess a part of His Dark Materials? or did you make it up? If you made it up, that was very clever! I wonder what Amanda and Sarek think of Spock suddenly getting a Daemon when he is in his thirties...

I also adored the fact that Bones' daemon enjoyed cuddling with Septon.

Anyway, very well done!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing!

The princess thing isn't from HDM, but I thought it made a good background... Although it felt a little weird to basically put Spock in the same position as an earth princess afterward, ha. And I think that while Amanda would be pleased about Spock's daemon Sarek would probably disapprove, at least a little, however much it might be better than no soul at all.

On the other hand, Spock would still have Kirk, so Sarek's feelings don't matter so much at that point. :)

(And we all just know McCoy's all warm and fuzzy on the inside, amirite?)

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Summary:

Sequel to: Take a Third Option
Series: The Idiots Guide to Multi-species Polyamorous Relationships
Story summary: When it comes to dating (love, relationships, and/or talking about his feelings) Jim has no idea what he’s doing, but that has never stopped him. So it makes perfect sense that he dives right into the deep end of this relationship thing and moves in with Spock and Nyota four days after they decided that they all kind of love each other in that way. Did he mention they can’t have sex for the next eight weeks? This may end up body bag bad.

Basically, I got tired of breaking Spock and Nyota up just to have K/S goodness and decided that threesomes can be a good thing. K/S/U


Categories: Fiction
Characters: McCoy, Uhura
Crossover Fandom: None
Genres: K/S plus K/other or S/other, Kirk/Spock Slash, Polyamorous
Other Languages: None
Specific movie: None
Story Type: Angst, Character Study, Erotica, Established Relationship, First Time, Fluff, Humor, Hurt/Comfort, Romance
Trope (OPTIONAL): Hurt Kirk, Hurt Spock
Universe: Abrams Universe
Warnings: Caveat lector/Choose Not to Warn
Series: The Idiot's Guide to Multi-species Polyamorous Relationships
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 46823 Read Count: 8330
[Report This] Published: 08/19/2013 Updated: 03/29/2014
Reviewer: bemusedfox Signed
Date: 08/20/2013 Title: Chapter 1: Step 10: Moving in Together (no one said he had to follow the guide in chronological order or at all)

interesting. though there is a mistype where you call spock's apartment jim's husband's apartment.