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Reviewer: AKO Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/24/2018 12:57 PM Title: …find their rest in you.

This is one of the RBEST explanations of "why Spock went to Gol."


I am forever glad that you allowed the two of them to reconcile! Thank you!



Reviewer: LSPINGLES Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11/19/2017 10:09 PM Title: …find their rest in you.

I really loved this story.  I liked the concept you introduced of the different bonds.  I enjoyed how you explored Spock's reluctance to engage in sexual relationship with Jim in a totally believable way.  I myself feel that Jim and Spock were not involved sexually during the first 5 year mission (just because it wouldn't be right for Captain / First Officer to be in such a relationship) but that a telepathic bond may have started (hence Spock's ability to believe Jim was alive despite logic indicating otherwise in the Tholian Web or to find him over parsec's of space - Gamesters of Triskellion).   My only explanation for his trip to Gol was some misunderstanding of where their relationship was heading or fear or both.  So your story aligns with my head canon.  Just wondered does this story align with your view of when they got involved / why Spock went to Gol or is it just a position you took for this story. 

Reviewer: angelocustode Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11/14/2017 3:17 PM Title: And our hearts are restless

I love this story so much, the first chapter in particular, before everything becomes complicated. I am fascinated by the idea that the quest for oneness with the other is in the end a search for oneness with the Divine, the All, that which transcends. Your descriptions of the mind space are addictive, I'd stay there for ever! 

Author's Response: Thank you.

Reviewer: PaintedBird Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/09/2017 2:29 AM Title: …find their rest in you.

I was intrigued by your premise that relationhips are searches for the divine.  It is a premise that I don't remember having seen before.  Your descriptions of the boys' interactions was pretty on character, too.

But there were a few things I would suggest you work on.  More balance between dialogue and description I think would help.  You tend to have extended stretches of description or plot development where there is no dialogue and then extended dialogue with little description of the action.  Better balance would help your flow.

Otherwise, it was an interesting take on your concept and I look forward to seeing what you do next.  Good luck!


Author's Response: Thank you.

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