Date: 05/25/2015 10:53 PM Title: Carnival - Chapter One
I loved the carnival you dreamed up, especially the variations of standard carnival attractions, like "Dump a Klingon" and "Guess your weight and planet."
I also enjoyed Kirk's assessment of his own viability as a romantic partner and Spock's aplomb once they finally got down to business. And I especially loved this line: "Never more than now."
Thanks for a great story!
Date: 12/17/2010 6:29 AM Title: Carnival - Chapter One
I really like this. The description of the carnival was perfect and the fortune teller was so original and endearing for me. Jim fixing his mistake was also well done. As well as making Spock keep the pile of laundry on the ground.
The ending was a bit of a sudden change, though. Their conversation built up by emphasizing Jim's insecurities and their solid agreement to take it slow... and then they had sex anyway. I understand it felt right for them, but it still seemed like a real 180. It was a bit jarring for me.
I still liked it overall. Well done.
Date: 07/31/2009 9:32 PM Title: Carnival - Chapter One
This is a marvelous story. I was consistently delighted by its sly lightness. More than that: Here, every sentence has its place - take away one, and the story would be less for it, would suffer in pacing and color. The laundry-bag fortunetelling in ABAB rhymed iambic verse is a stroke of GENIUS. I shall be reading this story many times in the future.
Date: 08/24/2008 5:06 PM Title: Carnival - Chapter One
I love how this story has a serious theme, enlivened with Jesmihr’s signature humor. Wonderful story of the aftermath of Deneva, a grieving Kirk, and an insighful fortune teller. It's funny, thoughful, and has some hot sex scenes! I thoroughly enjoyed this.