Date: 04/27/2015 6:50 PM Title: Chapter 1
Glad to see another story in the series that began with "A Different Corner." It promises to be quite interesting. I am intrigued by the fact that as the story begins, Kirk seems to take almost exclusive responsibility for Spock's stay in the psych ward five years earlier. As I recall, the "psychotic break" that Spock experienced in "A Different Corner" was triggered by his obsession with Kirk (he himself called it an "addiction"), an obsession that led him to conspire with T'Pau to get Kirk "grounded," off the Enterprise and into the Admiralty. When Kirk learned the truth about Spock's role, it plunged him into a terrible, dark place that he could hardly bear to contemplate. He drank himself into a stupor and told Spock never to come home again. That triggered the psychotic break, but as I understood the story, it did not cause it -- the cause was the contradiction between Spock's own ethics and values and the obsessive and unethical act he had committed against Kirk. (If you want to get technical, I believe it was McCoy who had Spock committed to the psych ward. I certainly hope that civil committment will be considered an archaic practice by the 23d century, but that's another story.)
Of course, this chapter was narrated excusively from Kirk's point of view. And that raises fascinating questions. Is Kirk being objective about what happened five years earlier? Is he ignoring Spock's own responsibility for what happened? Is it healthy for him to shoulder so much of the blame? And is it healthy for him constantly to bend over backwards to give Spock "whatever he desired"? Or is this something he really needs to do to overcome him own darker tendencies, his own self-centeredness? I mean, other couples have blow-outs in which one tells the other never to come home again, but they don't necessarily spend the next five years atoning for it. Logic might dictate that one not take a statement made in a drunken rage as the last word on the matter.
And -- is Kirk really OK without the Enterprise in his life? Or will he reach a point at which he needs to get back his command, as McCoy prescribed in The Wrath of Khan? I appreciate Kirk's devotion to Spock, but can't help wondering if such single-minded devotion is not taking a subconscious toll.
It is interesting that although Kirk insisted on paying for the house as a "penance" and a way of expressing his devotion to Spock, it was actually Kirk who chose the house and then asked Spock if it was "alright" if he purchased the house. Hmm. Perhaps Kirk divined that it was something Spock would want, or perhaps this is a sign of an ... interesting dynamic in their relationship.
Perhaps I am reading way too much into the otherwise deeply loving relationship that was portrayed in this chapter (I also noticed that although it was only their second night in the house, it was suggested that they didn't wake up together). I plead as an excuse that your characterizations tend to be complex and subtle and based on real psychology. In any case, I'm eager for more!
Dunyazad, I love you! <3. Here is what I will answer directly: Yes, the fact that this is Kirk's POV, which I shared very little of in the latter half of ADC, is the key to this narrative. Many things you have pointed out are quite true; certainly your keen observations from the first story are.
Pay close attention to the last sentence....just sayin'.
Date: 04/27/2015 3:43 AM Title: Chapter 1
What a lovely beginning. I can't wait to see where you take this.
I can't wait to see where you take this.
Me too, quite frankly! I really wanted to go light and fluffy, but it seems to want to turn into something a bit heavier (although nowhere near as angsty as ADC). We'll see! Thank you for commenting!
Date: 04/26/2015 7:30 PM Title: Chapter 1
Your description of the view of San Francisco was stunning. This makes me wonder what he did that resulted in Spock having a psychotic break. If you wrote it I probably read it and can't think of it right now.
None the less, loved this!! Looking forward to the next chapter.
This makes me wonder what he did that resulted in Spock having a psychotic break
You may not have read or have forgotten "A Different Corner," which I wrote almost two years ago... If you want to "cheat" or refresh your memory, you can go to Chapter 32. http://www.ksarchive.com/viewstory.php?sid=5382&chapter=32 But I think you can get by not having read it to enjoy this story.
Thanks for your kind words!
Date: 04/26/2015 4:57 PM Title: Chapter 1
What a lovely beginning! The description of the house, especially Spock's crow's nest, is so compelling! Just like a scene from a movie, i can ' t get it out of my head, i just want to continue reading! More, more please! The way Jim is climbing the stairs with that mug of steaming tea, i can see it before my eyes! So sweet and loving! The fact that Jim paid for the house on his own and refused financial support from his father in law, is very moving. Thank you for this sequel !
Thank you for commenting and being the FIRST! It's always a bit nerve-wracking waiting for that first one as you wonder if anyone will like what you write. The crow's nest is an image I've been carrying in my head for a few months now and it won't go away... finally I'm getting around to writing this story that refuses to not let me write it! :) D.