Date: 06/27/2015 6:36 AM Title: Chapter 1
i love your storysa281; so sweeta281; May i translate it into Chinesea311; I want show it to the people who like them like we doa281;Please reply to me soona292;thank you so mucha281;
There are a lot of numbers, and speech marks in your review... I'm not sure if the site deals with the Chinese language. I think, maybe, you should ask the webmistress of the site if it's possible to put the translation up on this site, because if you are genuine, and the story can be posted on THIS site only, creditting me as the author, and you as tranlator, it'd be interested to see if it could be done. ONLY if it's on THIS site ONLY, and mentions that I'm the author. Ask the webmistress FIRST, please.
Date: 04/02/2015 7:16 AM Title: Chapter 1
I feel like the first part of the story is missing meaning I think you shld have taken the time to actually tell the whole story of how Jim got hurt as it happened rather than just run thru it in a couple of paragraphs. I also wished his injuries were more realistic and detailed rather than just saying he fell onto poisonous ground which seemes farfetched a bit. I also did not at all understand why he wld need a penis pump. I don't mean to seem harsh, I just feel this has potential to be a good story if you took more time with better details. Also words are capitalized tht don't need to be.
I tell you what, go and write your own version of the story...