Reviews For Dark Butler
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Reviewer: Dunyazad Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/27/2014 3:56 AM Title: Chapter 3

The summary of the story is interesting, and I am eager to see more. As I wrote in an earlier review, the screenplay format creates a lot of distance between characters and reader. 

I don't understand some of the plot points and details of this story.  Even if Uhura is the most famous person in the world, why would the Klingons make her the target of an invasion? If they want to do away with her, wouldn't that be the object of a covert operation, like the assassination of Usama bin Ladin? 

Re Spock's desire to glom on to people's katras so that he can absorb what they know and then return them to their rightful owner, how would that work? As I understand the idea, the person who originally held the katra would be dead, so how could the katra be returned? 

In a space-going society, why would people put paper correspondnce in a mailbox? It seems there would be quicker and easier ways.

Reviewer: DivaPammy Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/26/2014 7:54 PM Title: Chapter 2

Like the concept but HATE the format! Seriously. Format is too convoluted. I encourage you to write the story as a story and not as a script. It would be more enjoyable I think.

I do like this concept and would love to know why these supposedly powerful men are letting one prissy woman make such demands. And more information on Spocks background and this whole "eating katras" thing. 

Change the format and keep it going! I am intrigued by the idea!

Reviewer: Dunyazad Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/26/2014 2:14 AM Title: Chapter 1

I think the movie transcript mode is quite interesting. I like the shifts from seeing Sarek in his room to seeing him on the screen. I am not sure, though, that reading the transcript is as effective as a more conventional narrative. The transcript format seems to create a lot of distance between the reader and the characters. But perhaps that is your intent? If so, it works well.

The offer re Uhura's katra sounds like a Faustian bargain, but I am wondering why the offer makes any sense, if Sarek does not even want Uhura's katra? 

I didn't understand this: "I have heard from outside sources that there is a plot from the Klingons to attack the Federation soon enough, and my daughter is gaining too much popularity for her own good." I dont' understand the connection between the Klingon plot and Uhura's popularity.

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