Date: 11/14/2019 11:49 PM Title: Chapter 1
Your story needed to be brought to an end when Spock rescued himself, find a way to expose the rest of your "bad guys", stick in the obligatory sex scenes. It gets too messy otherwise with pregnant Klingons going into labor, somebody having an allergy attack, etc. What does any of that have to do with your mani story? And yet again, even after Spock is helped, by outsiders, NOT BY anybody from the Enterpris, to escape capture, Still, it is all about POOR Kirk and his sad Past, and his poor tortured self, and Spock has to do a mind link to rescue Kirk and make it all better. Seriously, not trying to mean, by look objectively at your story and fin a single moment, if you can, in which This New Jim Kirk shows even 1 Redeeming Quality, one actual trait of a Commander, one ounce of Strength as a Man/Person in which he is Strong for Spock. Not there from my reading POV.
Date: 11/14/2019 11:43 PM Title: Chapter 1
i am reading your story, and have to say, am like at say part way down and come on....and already sick and tired of Kirk in this story! He is totally unprofessional on this Mission, gets drunk....or intoxicated by some Blue Drug,,,,where was McCoy, by the way to check all this stuff before the crew had any of it, then he starts getting all Jealous of Spock...at a Diplomatic Function, acting like a teen? Then when they beam him up, all McCoy cares about is Jim,Jim,Jim....? like, Spock is missing, we have a murdered Gal down on the Planet...but oh well, McCoy has to stay on the ship and baby Jim....poor Jim....he has to make sure the Captain...not much of one!....is locked away and Protected....does this CMO EVEN CARE TO keep up with any investigations, any searches going on for Spock....? Well, I guess, from a distance! Oye! This is what I dislike MOST about the JJ Abrams' Stre Trek Universe....the idea that Kirk is allowed to be some irresponsible Twit, then when disaster Strikes, he becomes the one and only "victim"....sheesh, even Spock, who has been taken hostage.."is worried about Jim,"....just can not WAIT to see what other "horrible things" befall...POOR KIRK in your story!
Date: 11/14/2019 10:46 PM Title: Chapter 1
i am reading your story, and have to say, am like at say part way down and come on....and already sick and tired of Kirk in this story! He is totally unprofessional on this Mission, gets drunk....or intoxicated by some Blue Drug,,,,where was McCoy, by the way to check all this stuff before the crew had any of it, then he starts getting all Jealous of Spock...at a Diplomatic Function, acting like a teen? Then when they beam him up, all McCoy cares about is Jim,Jim,Jim....? like, Spock is missing, we have a murdered Gal down on the Planet...but oh well, McCoy has to stay on the ship and baby Jim....poor Jim....he has to make sure the Captain...not much of one!....is locked away and Protected....does this CMO EVEN CARE TO keep up with any investigations, any searches going on for Spock....? Well, I guess, from a distance! Oye! This is what I dislike MOST about the JJ Abrams' Stre Trek Universe....the idea that Kirk is allowed to be some irresponsible Twit, then when disaster Strikes, he becomes the one and only "victim"....sheesh, even Spock, who has been taken hostage.."is worried about Jim,"....just can not WAIT to see what other "horrible things" befall...POOR KIRK in your story!
Date: 07/23/2015 9:20 PM Title: Chapter 1
Very well done! I too, hate when I start reading a great story and then realize that it is not complete. Thank you for completing this! I enjoyed it!!
Date: 06/09/2015 7:01 PM Title: Chapter 1
It's rare that good female characterisations are seen in fanfic my only thought is that the fic should be longer with more about these women
Author's Response:
I would also really like to write more about these women, though I think maybe someday I will write an original story about Ester's journey. I don't know if there's more room for them in this particular fanfic. Thank you so much for your review!
Date: 01/23/2015 6:00 PM Title: Chapter 1
Brilliant, utterly brilliant. "I am Spock of Vulcan, and I do not have sconces." The death of Dr. Katz is quite unfortunate, as she and Bones would have made a very interesting couple. Clear, clever, sarcastic, vastly entertaining style of writing. Each time I open this story I read something I'd missed before, and it holds my attention to the last word. Well done.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your review. I never even considered Bones and Ester as a couple, partially cause I knew I was going to kill her at the end and partially cause in my mind she was gay-I considered having her ex-wife (a cop) show up after she died but in the end decided against it-though you're right Bones and Ester would be interesting. The word that comes to mind is incendiary. Food for thought. The sconces line seems to be an audience favorite, and it's definitely one of my best. I am so delighted you enjoy my story enough to read it more than once! Thank you so much! I am deeply honored.
[Report This]Date: 12/12/2014 5:54 AM Title: Chapter 1
I really like this story.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much!
Date: 06/25/2014 10:52 PM Title: Chapter 1
What a rollickin' good Trek tale. It kept me on the edge of my seat. I liked the flashes of humor and the flashes of depth. The characterizations were terrific, and Ester was a great OC. I wonder if the doctrine to which you were referring in the title was actually "Corpus delicti"? Habeas corpus is a very different concept. Like others who have commented, I hope you will be writing more in this fandom.
Author's Response:
Ooo, corpus delicti would have been so much better! I actually WAS thinking about the writ of habeas corpus cuz when I started the fic I thought it was going to be more litigation oriented, but it didn't turn out that way (there was gonna be like, a car chase scene and a trial and everything, but by page 50 I was more interested in the characters than the action so...) and I hate coming up with new titles. Honestly, titles are never my strong suit. I'm so glad you liked Ester! I tried really hard to make her a different kind of OC. And yeah, I've already found a wonderful new plot bunny that will hopefully play out into another fic. ^_^ Thank you so much!
[Report This]Date: 06/25/2014 9:31 AM Title: Chapter 1
Very well written. I defintely hope you will be adding more to this fandom. You're imagination has promise.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much! Hopefully my imagination will deliver on the promise. ^_~
[Report This]Date: 06/25/2014 9:30 AM Title: Chapter 1
This was excellent, and had me on the edge of my seat the entire time. It had a little bit of everything; suspense, angst, humor, fluff...I love every minute of it. Thank you so much for sharing, and I certianly hope we will see more from in the future?
Author's Response:
I'm so glad you liked it! Thank you so much for reviewing. And yeah, I've got a couple other fic ideas I'm playing around with.
[Report This]Date: 06/25/2014 1:15 AM Title: Chapter 1
I absolutely adored reading this fic. this was perfect. :)
Author's Response:
That is so kind of you. Thank you so much!
[Report This]Date: 06/24/2014 7:02 PM Title: Chapter 1
You have my unending gratitude for writing and posting this story. My world is a brighter place after reading this story. Action, drama, love, betrayal, it was all there. Especially the love. I hung on for dear life through it all and ... wow. That's all. And thank you. So very very much. You rule. Keep writing, because I want more. Yeah. Wow....
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your review! I'm so happy you liked the fic.