Date: 07/18/2015 8:00 PM Title: Chapter 1
I usually ignore typos, but this one was a little too funny not to bring to your attention.
“"Sir?” The new Andorian lieutenant from Navigation—Favlez, Jim thought her name was—was standing by his chair. “Relieving you for the next shirt, sir.""
I feel like you meant shift. But I understand Favlez. I would also like to relieve Captain Kirk of his shirt.
Date: 02/27/2014 3:04 AM Title: Chapter 1
Lovely, it goes straight to the heart. Abrams' Jim is so much in character here that for a good part of the story one gets the temptation to kick him. I'm absolutely sure that only in Spock's calm, grounded, determined love and dedication he can lose himself to ultimately find himself.
I adore the comment on Spock's eidetic memory seizing greedily on every sensation to keep it in store for eternity. It renders so well the intense focus of the moment.
Date: 02/26/2014 9:53 PM Title: Chapter 1
LOVE this line: “I have served under you for sixteen months, twenty-four days, nines, hours, and eighteen minutes,” he said, the corners of his mouth turning up ever so slightly. “I assure you, sir, I can fix whatever mess you might make.”
Date: 02/26/2014 9:11 PM Title: Chapter 1
And, 'i love you'.
You have a knack of making me laugh out loud in all the right places and for making my toes curl for all the right reasons in the other places too.
Absolutely LOVED this.
Now, please replace, "Later that evening, Jim Kirk had his first of more than 18,000 close encounters with a Vulcan penis—frals and all." with the story of what happened next!
Yeah, there's probably a need for a sequel, but this story had already gone waay over its original word count.
Date: 02/26/2014 8:39 PM Title: Chapter 1
Awww. Poor Jim, doesn't know what he wants, does he? And when he finally figures it out it takes a near death experience for him to figure it out, too. Spock is such a sweetheart, being everything for Jim without him even asking. You write the best love stories. And frals! YES! I knew they'd make an appearance again eventually. Awesome story. Thanks so much!