Date: 06/26/2015 6:36 AM Title: Chapter 12
You did an amazing job in this reinterpretation of one of my bestloved movies. Retelling the story in KS-mode you maintained what makes it fascinating while putting in some of what is unique to our boys. There is so much tenderness in here and the final paragraphs made me shed some tear, which means a lot because I assure you that I do not cry easily anymore over KS stories. Thank you for a full immersion in the emotions of my youth.
Date: 01/14/2014 10:45 AM Title: Chapter 12
Wow, what an ending! I mean, I wish they'd been able to be together more (don't we all? they're our boys and we want them to be together). But a fabulous telling. Thank you.
And thank YOU!
I think the next story I write will have to have a Hollywood ending, for sure!
Date: 01/14/2014 1:45 AM Title: Chapter 12
Aww, what a lovely, bittersweet ending. Did I miss "nobody puts Kam-bu in a coner" or did it just not work its way into the story? Regardless, this was a great coming of age story. Its elegiac quality will haunt me for some time to come.
Yeah, decided to forego that bit! I debated it but it didn't feel right! Thank you, especially, for all your feedback on this story! It encouraged me to finish it! Dee
Date: 01/13/2014 1:09 AM Title: Chapter 11
Powerful. Of course I knew this was coming, and I wondered how you would handle it. The chapter did not disappoint. Not only did Spock vindiate Jimmy, but the chapter gave us a piercing look at Spock's relationship with his father.
Date: 01/09/2014 3:14 AM Title: Chapter 7
Wonderful love-making -- this is one of the best first times I think I have ever read. I love this Spock, who knows what he wants. Am anticipating the parallels between the "DD" characters and their Vulcan counterparts, such as the kleptomanic Sah'mis.
Yes, modeled after one of the most tender and heart-felt love scenes I've ever seen in a movie...all these years later and I still watch that scene over and over again!
Date: 01/04/2014 2:47 AM Title: Chapter 5
See, this is why I always thought that Patrick Swayze's character in "DD" had something in common with James T. Kirk. Perhaps it's the combination of technical skill, perseverance, intuition and sheer animal magnitism. Really enjoyed this chapter.
Yes indeed! Those two are definitely cut from the same cloth! Thanks for commenting!
Date: 01/01/2014 5:53 PM Title: Chapter 4
Ah, S'Kendaal shows his true colors. Shouldn't Spock be borrowing credits, not dollars, from Sarek? I like this Sarek and his trust in his son.
Well, I didn't want to imply one denomination or another when referring to currency but I see a "$" crept in - now deleted, thanks! And it is fun satisfying to write a Sarek who trusts, loves and respects his son! D.
Date: 12/30/2013 3:24 AM Title: Chapter 2
The parallels with the film are really cool -- I sputtered when I realized that Spock's family calls him by a common Vulcan endearment that means "Baby" -- and I can't wait to see how they play out. I noticed the waiter on his way to medical school. ...
I forgot to mention, in my comment on the first chapter, how much I appreciated the evocative description of the way the desert burst with life that summer. It's a metaphor, an objective correlative for the change we expect to see in Spock -- the stirring of desire, the pulse of new life. It reminded me of the way Toni Morrison used the symbolism of the marigolds' failure to bloom to achieve the reverse effect in the The Bluest Eye. This is really superlative writing.
Indeed - the blossoming of the long-dormant desert symbolizes the blossoming of Spock! And thanks for the comparison to Toni Morrison!
Date: 12/29/2013 9:44 PM Title: Chapter 2
I' m intrigued by many facets of this promising beginning of your new story! I was a little confused at first to see Spock as pater familias, having three children and happily married to T' Pring. And just when I got used to that ,Spock is transforming into Mother goose and starts telling his adult son this highly personal lovestory between himself as a teenager and Jim Kirk .This could be an unlikely situation , but you handle it very well so it ' s credible. You have got me speculating about what has happened in their lifes, why are they not together? I suppose Jim wil teach his kan-bu how to dance......
Yes - it is definitely a little 'out there' but you know, there's some pretty ceative stories out there that have inspired me to just 'go with it' - so 'why not?' I say. I wasn't planning on going into too much of a back story on this one but I figure in at least one of the myriad parallel universes out there Spock is content enough to stay on his home world. Thanks for commenting! D.
Date: 12/29/2013 12:54 AM Title: Chapter 1
It's gotta be "Dirty Dancing" -- I've always thought the Patrick Swayze character had some traits in common with James T. Kirk. Wonderfully transposed, with the scene beautifully and vividly set. Oooh, I have a feeling this is going to be good (and probably sad ....)