Date: 12/06/2013 9:41 PM Title: Chapter 9
Wow, that was WONDERFUL! You've portrayed them so well and have expertly woven in elements from other episodes. I love the series of realizations that you bring Kirk and Spock to separately, then once they're ready, you have them acting in synch again. Truly, this story was masterfully done!
An awful lot of stories around here are given five stars, but this one deserves SIX!
Really sorry not to have replied to this review - I've not been on the site for a while. This is such a kind message to leave and it's truly appreciated. I am sure you know this, but it makes such a huge difference to get feedback like this and it's so easy to read and leave nothing. Thank you! Going to reply to your other reviews...
Date: 10/20/2013 10:47 AM Title: Chapter 9
I wasn't worried that Spock and Kirk would save the day, but I'm sorry Man had to die when it looked like he and Eli might be able to put a band-aid on their friendship breach. I'm very glad that Peter survived to shoot hoops with his uncle again and hope that Jim drags Spock along - I'd love to see him make a basket without breaking a sweat. Enjoyed it and look forward to more of your take on the Trek universe!
Thanks so much. I haven't a clue how to write about Vulcans shooting hoops, being neither a Vulcan nor a basketball player, but I guess it's always good to have a challenge. Sorry about Man, think it's always harder to read about character deaths than to write about them, because the writer has the comfort of being in control, but it was important to me to balance the story and also to show Kirk and Spock what might have happened. I was fairly sure people would rather I killed off Man than either of the Enterprise duo!
Date: 10/20/2013 9:51 AM Title: Chapter 9
Love it! I had tears in my eyes during the ship-to-ship communication scenes - finally they're talking about what went wrong (or not)! And I love how they outsmarted M3 this time.
Have you ever thought of cross-posting your work on AO3 (http://archiveofourown.org/)? There's plenty of gen stories on the archive, it isn't only for slash!
Thank you so much, it's really kind of you to write. I haven't come across archiveofourown and will look it up, thanks. I also post at fanfiction.com. Have a good week!