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Reviewer: Pamdizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/19/2013 10:48 PM Title: The Secret Admirer

This isn't bad work, but it is riddled with small errors throughout. I can see that your first chapter was labored over, but in the second chapter, things kind of fall apart in terms of readability. The story is there. The romance is there. The characterizations (in the first chapter are there). The consistency and form leaves something to be desired. I think if you found yourself a dedicated beta reader, this story, which has wonderful potential, could really be polished into a fine little gem.


Happy writing and do continue! <3

Reviewer: ironland Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/19/2013 11:10 AM Title: The Secret Admirer

This is most wonderful. Thank you .

Sweet Jim , sign.

 

Reviewer: Dahliaxat Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/19/2013 9:54 AM Title: The Secret Admirer

I really enjoyed this, but part two confused me a little. Thanks for sharing.

Reviewer: Sera Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/18/2013 7:18 PM Title: The Secret Admirer Himself

Thats so beautiful. Thank you.

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I'm happy that you like it!

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