Date: 01/12/2013 11:19 PM Title: Chapter 2
In depth philosophy and great plotting in one chapter -- I like the way you're making my brain do press ups while still keeping my emotions engaged. Anyone tempted to dismiss fanfiction as lightweight fluff should take a look at this.
Very forgiving of you, but you are now getting through these chapters a lot quicker than I am writing them, so beware!
Date: 12/10/2012 4:16 PM Title: Chapter 2
My, what a tangled web you weave... my fears are not abating!
Great, looking forward to more :)
Thank you so much for sticking with it. I am sorry about your fears; I wasn't actually trying to abate them, but the night is yet young. More soon...
Date: 12/10/2012 8:21 AM Title: Chapter 2
So, I've had to go and relearn some philosophy, in particular Heraclitus, something I've not done for over 20 years; to say my brain is a little fried would be an understatment.
I kinda figured Kirk had told Saredin to ensure Spock gets to Gol for his safety. I had a Clinical Lead once who said that "one should always trust one's gut", in such a upperclass British accent, I would laugh, but she was right, as is Kirk, when your radar pings you should always go with it. I cannot wait to find out what the Mila people are up to and how it affects Spock.
As usual, superb writing.
First of all, thank you for being so very kind and generous. Secondly, I am hugely impressed that you figured where I was going with the Kirk/Saredin message and that you went back to Heraclitus for background reading - that's completely above and beyond the call of duty, especially as, if I recall correctly, you have some time off work just now so you shouldn't really be spending it on Greek philosophy, and I feel rather guilty. I hadn't read Heraclitus for 20 years, either - in fact, nearer 25, and I had to go back and check a couple of things, sorry about frying your brain as well as mine. Well, I have a British accent myself, though not an upper class one, and I agree about following your gut, it's probably one of the best lessons I've learned in adult life. My response is now longer than your review! Thank you again.
Date: 12/10/2012 5:27 AM Title: Chapter 2
Jane D doesn't write FF as I know it. FF can be breezy or brutal. I prefer that which elicits an emotional response, but I never expect it to offer a cognitive challenge. I haven't worked so hard since the last time I read "Heart of Darkness." I had to read these chapters twice, but it was worth it; and for the first time since college, decades ago, I wished to write margin notes--an up-til-now unperceived failing of online 'publishing'/reading.
The paragraph in which Spock contemplates his early study of Greek philosophy, and his course of thought on it, within the context of all else Jane weaves together, is remarkable. Kirk and Saredin both ponder original causation as Spock and McCoy separately wonder what accounts for a dramatic change they see in Kirk? Can 'intuition without logic only get him so far'? It's fun to go digging for the answers in a story like this, to try to follow the different threads. I hope people will make the mental effort needed to do the tale justice, but I won't be suprised if it garners fewer reviews than previous Jane stories. It isn't fluff.
I am going to print this review out and keep it somewhere to remind myself in dark days that I once inspired it. Thank you so much, and I entirely appreciate the point about an emotional response - I hope to do better further on in the story but it was something of a choice - I'd love to be pointed in the direction of any other piece about Heraclitus and/or Aristotle which managed to elicit an emotional response. Obviously, for my next challenge...
Date: 12/10/2012 2:05 AM Title: Chapter 2
Sorry I haven't been on here to review til now... good chapter, even though I'm ready to kick Spock - worst of all worlds indeed. Also, why is Kirk ignoring his intution? He never does that. Just because he's trying to compensate for Spock not being there... idiots, the both of them.
Thank you so much, and I am sorry that I am taking more time over this book, but I promise I will update regularly, even if with slightly longer gaps.
Date: 12/09/2012 1:55 AM Title: Chapter 2
This is so well done, seriously.
We can see Jim and Spock going on two seperate journeys to know themselves and the way they go about it is so interesting! The way their minds work in making decisions is so intricate. They're striving to do and be better than they were which drives them along nicely.
I still wish they were together on the mission, but for their characters it can't be helped
That is a very kind and generous sentiment considering how much I'm clearly upsetting you! Thank you for being so lovely; it means a great deal.