Date: 12/07/2013 3:43 AM Title: Chapter 5
I don't quite understand. Starfleet is the military and exploration arm of the Federation. The Kliingons and Romulans can't declare war on Starfleet; they can only declare war on the Federation. And Vulcan IS a member of the Federation; they're a FOUNDING member of the Federation.
Date: 11/04/2012 1:11 AM Title: Chapter 5
I love the politics of this.
Thank you! Writing angst is relatively easy; getting the politics right is much harder, I keep waiting for someone to say "The Romulans would never do that because..."
Date: 11/03/2012 3:44 AM Title: Chapter 5
Loving this story to pieces. Definitely a high point for me when new chapters come out. You seem to like ratcheting that drama up to 11. You've got me worried here. Hoping their love doesn't go unrequited forever...
I am hugely flattered that my chapters are a high point for you. I'm having such fun writing it that it's completely wonderful that anyone out there is also enjoying the process. Thank you so, so much.
Date: 11/03/2012 2:51 AM Title: Chapter 5
Oh, you are fantastic! I owe you much, for offering the best Trek entertainment available at the moment, and for updating regularly (even if not as fast as I can read:).
I did find the opening paragraph of this chapter jarring. It took me out of the moment and, for a while, it was like listening to someone describing scenes from a movie I'd missed, or like watching a sporting event that was pre-recorded, having lost the opportunity to see it in real time. If I recall correctly, you've used this 'jump' technique before: then, too, it felt as though you'd gotten into your story, then had the impulse to wrap it up quickly.
The "boardroom" brought me back to the moment and restored balance, and I thoroughly enjoyed the characterizations (though I hope Spock won't be drawn as an incompetent military mind).
I love the original scenarios you come up with and the vivid 'scenes' you create without needing to bog down the story in details better left to our genre familiar imaginations. If you stop writing Trek FF, I might stop reading it.
Wish I could offer better pay!
Well, I don't know about better pay - your reviews are rather better than my chapters. I am rather overwhelmed by them and by your kindness - thank you and thank you. (I take on board what you say about jumping, I know it's something of my style - just checking though, she says defensively, that I noticed you meticulously reviewed Chapters 1, 2, 3 and 5 and said 5 was a bit of a jump - did you skip 4? Or perhaps you didn't skip 4 and it's just that 5 was badly written, which is more than likely.) And don't worry about Spock. It's the weekend, more soon.
Date: 11/02/2012 3:20 PM Title: Chapter 5
AAARGH!!! I don't get how such a supposedly and self-proclaimedly intelligent species like the vulcans can be so fucking rude and stupid!!! They're making me really angry... and Spock seems to have gone over to their side... surely not! Omg, I need more of this story - you've put me on edge!!!
Date: 11/02/2012 1:56 PM Title: Chapter 5
The premise for this story of political intrigue, past relationships and loyalties is one of the best on the archive at present. It is a tense thriller and very enjoyable.
Thank you so much, you are currently my favourite person in the world!