Date: 08/19/2012 2:10 PM Title: Could You Stay?
I think another chapter would be great. It would be interesting to see how she would react when she found out why he has missed the date she planned for them and then see how Spock would respond/explain it to her. I can only hope that you will do another one and even though I do like the Uhura/Spock paring I would like think that despite everything that even though she would be hurt that she would understand why it did not work with them and why it will alwasy work with Jim and Spock.
Date: 08/19/2012 10:36 AM Title: Could You Stay?
Well done. A fine story.
A very good description of the relationship from Jim and Spock and Jims feeling for Spocks individuality and his needs.
But I see no solution for a happy end for her...
If I were her I would be very angry...
Spock had to be honest to her and himself...
But it's so often in life: you see the truth to late and then hurts.
Date: 08/19/2012 10:24 AM Title: Could You Stay?
I like it...BUt there are a few little typos: like it should be 'sync' instead of 'sink' and 'led' instead of 'lead' (that type of lead is that poisonous stuff found in paint) and you have 'faultier' where 'fault' should be lol. Just minor things. I always like it when readers point that stuff out to me, otherwise, I'm certainly not going to catch and everyone who reads my story will think I'm a dingbat! I'm not a dingbat! and neither are you, lol. It's just hard to proof one's own work, yes?
Anyway, I liked it very much. I think it would be neat to see the dinner from Uhura's perspetive and to see her reaction to him not showing. I say go for it!
You could also do a Jim perspective and make it a three part. Would be cool.
Date: 08/19/2012 3:23 AM Title: Could You Stay?
I do feel sorry for Uhura, she made that Vulcan diner and all, but Jim was feeling really down, and Spock I think wanted to help Jim, like Jim helped Spock with the loss of his mother.
Great job ...I liked this little story.