Date: 05/05/2012 11:48 AM Title: Chapter 1
Yep two rebels finding each other-it had to be. Great little story.
Noticed a few small details; two stood to for me, twice you used the word damp when I think you mean dam and the way this story is written you can use authority in the singular rather than authorities as a plural-it's one of those funny little English quirks. I hope you don't mind having that feedback-say so if you do. I love your writing.
Author's Response: Thank you so much :) No I don't mind if you correct me - I appreciate it. Yes, I meant dam.. and I also spotted the other failures you listed after reading again this morning. Guess I have to use the dictonary more often - or stop posting in the middle of the night when my brain wants to sleep XD So thank you again! I'm happy you like it :)