Date: 03/06/2012 3:31 AM Title: The First Incident
Wow! Great first chapter. I love how you went into detail about the downfall of Spock and Uhura's relationship. Most fics brush that event aside.
One thing I would like to point out is Spock's view of Jim's opinion of homosexuals. I would think (hopefully) that homosexuality on Earth is not that big of a deal in the future. Yes, maybe straight men would still be cautious around gay men, but I don't think Spock's sexuality would be a big issue. That part had me a bit confused. Just something to think about.
Fantastic cliff-hanger! I am really nervous for Spock. I bet Jim will come to the rescue. I look forward to reading more of this. Keep going, please. You are a great writer.
I will get to that. Spock bases his opinion off of research and the misconception that Jim is completely straight. I tried to make it seem as though Spock's real issue here is not that Jim will be uncomfortable because's he's gay, but because he both is gay AND attracted to Jim. Still, he's basing it on faulty research and Jim will set the record straight. Don't worry. :) Spocks' still new to this whole sexuality thing, but he will get a handle on it and Jim will definitely get to do some ass-kicking. Just not for a little bit.
Thank you for reading and thank you so much for the compliment. I'm blushing. ;)
Date: 03/05/2012 11:15 PM Title: The First Incident
Wow! I am so excited to see you tackle this prompt! And i love kirk x virgin!Spock... It's going to be so good! Awww... Spock loving Kirk from afar and only being able to respond sexually to him is so sweet :) looking forward to your next post!!!
I'm glad you like it so far. As with the other challenges I've answered, this one wouldn't quit nagging at me. I can't stand bigotry in any form and so it kind of called to me and had to attempt it, even though I'm not entirely sure my writing boots fit as well as they used to. We'll see. I too, love Virgin!Spock, lol. Had to have him...
Date: 03/05/2012 9:28 PM Title: The First Incident
The challenge was a good one, and the way you have tackled the break in chapter is a great format, completely Spockian and factual then a sudden crash literally brings the fic straight into soemthing much nastier much darker and
A fic with a difference in content and style, looking forward to what happens next
I'm glad you think it Spockian. He can be intimidating to write when you're actually trying to keep him character. I wanted to get to his break with Uhura as soon as possible, and I knew exactly how I wanted to do it. I can't see that she would be anything other than accepting of his sexuality, especially if he discovered it while trying his best to be her lover. I figured he would think her the logical choice, but then biology would interviene and I've had that idea for the longest time and so it felt good to get it out of my head and onto paper, so to speak.
I'm glad that you and a couple others have voiced your opinions in the handling of that particular detail. :D