Date: 11/12/2011 8:24 AM Title: Chapter 1
Better than coffee!
Really exceptional, just the right doses of everything.
Thank you so much! Next time I am to be better than even chocolate, although it might be sacrilege to even attempt such a feat ;)
Date: 11/12/2011 6:56 AM Title: Chapter 1
This is fun, and the language aint't that bad... but mind you, after you have worked on an Australian farm and heard the language that goes on around there, everything else seems kind of tame lololol.
I like that you get how smart Spock is. Strangely, not a lot of people do.
You did puzzle me with one sentence: "Jim had never known that guilt could be retroactive". And oddity, that one. Unless you are saying that Jim has not really ever understood guilt?
A fascinating little fic so far, I enjoyed it a lot. You write good "crangsty slash fic".
Actually, I meant something more along the lines of: Jim didn't feel at all guilty when he provoked Spock before, because it was all for the good of the Federation. But then he sees what a genuinely kick ass individual Spock is and begins to experience all the guilt he didn't previously, compounded by the time lapse. It's kind of an improper usage of the term, which is probably why it was so confusing.
Thanks for reviewing; I'm so glad you enjoyed the story.