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Reviewer: Mirimee Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/27/2013 2:36 PM Title: Chapter 10

Please, Continue!!^_^



Author's Response:

Thanks so much reading. This story was written over two years ago, and was finished, but my English, and writing fic was very new to me. Reading it again, it has many faults in the storyline..some things make no sense, I will certainly try to fix them, and eventually post, but have no clue when. Thanks very much for taking the time to read it....I'll see if inspiration strikes, and perhaps update this story...

Reviewer: Candystar Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/06/2012 7:13 AM Title: Chapter 10

""""Have you heard of slash fiction James.""""

needs a ? here. also slash is written by men as well...some gay ....some straight. though it is mostly by fems lol & slash is gay....like m/m or f/f...not just male. so you might want to tweak that explanation just a little.

Reviewer: Candystar Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/06/2012 7:07 AM Title: Chapter 9

"""It was late evening when Jim was thinking about his brothers visit.""""

should be "brother's"

""""When are your sick games going to end Kodos."""

should be ? at the end.

Reviewer: Candystar Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/06/2012 7:03 AM Title: Chapter 8

ok this one has about three or four questions asked...but no ? at the end.

""""Do you so easily forget what you told me, what you told my guards."""""

""""How can you stay here in your secluded environment, away from the people that lie dead in the streets by your hands and now want to have sex with me."""""

"""""""Why would you think that my child. """""

""""""How would Spock react to that."""""

"""What if he rejects me."""

""""What if he founds me disgusting, vile and turns away."""

""""What if he won't want to work with me.""""

"""""My, my, aren't we in a chipper mood.""""

"""""""Now that would be difficult now would it.""""

"""""Besides, why should I when I have my little sex toy in front of me.""""

""""""Am I now.""""

""""""Oh, he said that did he."""

"""""Who is worrying."""""


ok all those need ? at the end not .'s

Reviewer: Candystar Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/06/2012 6:46 AM Title: Chapter 2

alright this is pretty much all cleaned up now. we've gone through it before & your writing is so much better technically now :D

just the one thing here really:

McCoy looked at his friend and had a strange feeling.

"""""""Hello Jim. I'm packed and ready to paint the town red. I've planned our whole itinerary. We are going to have so much fun." McCoy's voice dripping with glee."""""


since its all bones..it can all be one paragraph.

Reviewer: VCVZ Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/01/2012 10:37 PM Title: Chapter 10

That is messed up.
HOW DARE HE REFERENCE OUR SLASH MADE FROM LOVE LIKE THAT! D:
Jiiiim! ;_;

Reviewer: magpie1600 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 08/30/2012 6:49 AM Title: Chapter 9

OH the B******D.  I want to knock seven bells out of him.

Reviewer: VCVZ Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/30/2012 1:30 AM Title: Chapter 9

THAT BASTARD!
He sullies the name of "love"
>:-(

Reviewer: magpie1600 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08/27/2012 3:37 PM Title: Chapter 8

Poor Jim. 

Reviewer: cowgirl dressage Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/24/2012 11:24 PM Title: Chapter 7

god damn Kodos, I might have to skip the next chapter, but will return when its safe.  just a little bit squeemish about this.  love the fic though.



Author's Response:

I understand. Thanks for reading so far.

Reviewer: VCVZ Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/24/2012 4:05 PM Title: Chapter 7

-_-)...Kodos.

Oh, JIM! D':

Author's Response:

I know it's bad...glad you are hanging in there...perhaps not everyone will...



Author's Response:

I know it's bad...glad you are hanging in there...perhaps not everyone will...

Reviewer: Sera Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08/24/2012 2:11 PM Title: Chapter 7

thats horrible.

Author's Response:

I know the subject matter is difficult. Hang in there, we will see Spock later.

Reviewer: Sera Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08/22/2012 8:47 PM Title: Chapter 6

how sad.

Author's Response:

I know rape is always sad...but Jim will be get through it. Thanks for the rating and review.

Reviewer: VCVZ Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/22/2012 4:57 PM Title: Chapter 6

That bastard, Kodos.
Ooh, they're both in so much pain! :(

Author's Response:

Kodos is bad....but being bad is it something we are taught?  Or are we born evil? Hmmm. Thanks for reading..

Reviewer: Pamdizzle Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/22/2012 12:28 PM Title: Chapter 6

Awe, poor Jim. You have his voice so well, you always do. :)



Author's Response:

I do try my best..I thank you for reading.

Reviewer: magpie1600 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08/22/2012 8:20 AM Title: Chapter 6

Oh poor Jim.  But do Jim and Spock have a tenuous bond?



Author's Response:

We'll have to wait and see when Spock regains consciousness. Thanks for the rating and review.

Reviewer: cowgirl dressage Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/22/2012 4:14 AM Title: Chapter 6

wow!  i hadn't read this.  Great job!  I love your fics.  Everything is very clear and concise.  Can't wait to find out what is exactly wrong with Spock, that is, if it is other than  a bond trying to be born. 



Author's Response:

Thanks very much my friend...I tried very hard to correct my errors. But, I am sure there are still many more...Hopefully,  the readers will forgive me. I appreciate your review...

Reviewer: Sera Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08/20/2012 8:28 PM Title: Chapter 5

Very good. I hope you continue soon.
It's very dramatic. ...

Author's Response:

Thank you very much for your review. I may update soon.

Reviewer: SMM82 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/08/2012 12:17 PM Title: Chapter 5

Oooooo the plot thickens.

Well written.
Keep up the great work.
Please update soon.

SM



Author's Response:

It's been ages, but I actually updated. Thanks for reading thus far.

Reviewer: magpie1600 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03/07/2012 8:47 PM Title: Chapter 5

Poor Jim. That BASTARD.  I know he's a fictional character, but I want him to rot in ficitonal hell.



Author's Response:

Hello dear friend, thanks so much for reading this story so far. Yes, he is a bastard. But, there are always reasons behind what people do. Just to let you know that I updated a new chapter...

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