Date: 08/22/2017 8:53 PM Title: Chapter 1
*mind blown* the battle sequenses had me at the edge of my seat. I could see everything so clearly. And the emotions . . . they were crystaline in intensity. And the Vulcan reactions and fall out was more believable than in the movie. I'm so relieved they've found each other again, but shit. Shit. An entire planet and two sister planets and ships and countless lives just, gone. You did an amazing job with this. 30/10. You broke the charts.
Date: 08/24/2011 7:55 PM Title: Chapter 1
fuck man, this was *intense*!!
sparse and lean, beautiful and painful, this might be your best bit yet, it hits me like the fist of an angry god!
fuck. put me right back into that shocked headspace I lived in when the movie first came out; all those years of feeling and acting Vulcan, to watch my adopted homeworld die like that -- I cried, which is something I greatly prefer never to do. and this story put me right back there again, as if I'd just left a showing of the film.
very nicely done, damn. ouch. fuck.
Date: 08/21/2011 6:33 PM Title: Chapter 1
WOW!! You can really dish out the angst!! That was amazing. I was torn between trying to read it fast to see what happens next and wanting to read it really slow to savor each word. That's tough to do. Requires a lot of re-reading. :~) But I was good. I didn't jump ahead to the end.... (that was tough to avoid, too. ) Love your work