Date: 07/29/2014 2:15 AM Title: Chapter 1
I pictured Spock as the conscious one and Kirk in the bed. The phraseology seemed more Spockian, and the "just managed to save him" seemed like Spock.
I agree, making a voice that could be either of them is hard! Kudos to you for even trying.
Date: 08/16/2011 4:50 AM Title: Chapter 1
Isn't it funny how often the outsider can see what's really going on between our boys, but the boys themselves are (willfully) oblivious? I think Spock is the speaker and Jim the injured. "Asset" is a pretty Spockian word - and Jim never had any problem getting close to Spock, holding his hand when he's hurt, etc, or admitting his feelings, if only to himself. You did a good job making it so it could be either of them - you're right, their voices are so different.
Date: 08/16/2011 3:01 AM Title: Chapter 1
For some reason I keep picturing Spock as I read this. Regardless of whomever I put in the chair or on the bed, this is beautifully written.
Its also very touching. I keep wishing for Jim to wake up annd tell Spock that he is not just another crew mate.,
Kudos to you.
For some reson I read 'Kudos' as 'Kodos' there... I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you very much for your review! :D
Date: 08/16/2011 2:14 AM Title: Chapter 1
of course the only way they would admit their feelings out loud was after a life-threatening mission! you know, i think that's how most k/s feelings reveals go - after one or both of them have nearly lost their lives. oh well, it was a nice story, even though it was short. a nice little bit of conflict.
Personally, i think this came off a bit more Spock-flavored, but that's just me. :P
Spock-flavoured... yeah, I agree. I think that while Kirk can say things that are precise and nobody bats an eyelid, Spock would never say anything imprecise or use slang, so I don't think I quite managed to split the difference right. :P
Thanks for your review! :D