Date: 06/19/2015 3:47 AM Title: Misinformed
Honestly I prefer the first ending
Date: 04/10/2015 11:37 PM Title: Misinformed Alternate Ending.
Great writing hon! I loved this fic! ;o)
[Report This]Date: 05/27/2013 3:11 PM Title: Misinformed
So sad, but so perfect. I hate Uhura in this story.
Date: 08/20/2011 9:23 PM Title: Misinformed Alternate Ending.
I may be in the minority but I preferred this ending. Why do stories have to be happily ever after, that's not real life? And many authors are choosing to let the
"bad guy win" as it is- read some of PT Duetermann. I hope I spelled that correctly. I become angry at 90% of his endings, but I find myself waiting with bated breath for his next book.
I know we want to be read, I write in different fandoms, and I have learned, be true to yourself when you write. You'll be happier and you'll find that you still have an audience. Hugs
Date: 08/05/2011 12:43 PM Title: Misinformed
An interesting and intriguing thought that the breaking of a mental bond is so severe that it manifests as a physical problem.
I prefer this ending. There's less of Nyota becoming a crazy bitch. (although she is still a vindictive bitch)
Also I, personally, am not a fan of character death.
[Report This]Date: 08/04/2011 1:01 PM Title: Misinformed
Spock being a touch telepath, well when he and Nyota were melded he would have seen her madness, and possibly her lie.
However, the grey eyes was a poigniant plot device. I preferred the first version, but that's just me. Romeo and Juliet type stories aren't my cuppa.
I like the fact that logical Vulcans can be moved to compassion when faced with the truth, that they would try to help a wronged mate to cope with the agony.
Well written, good story with imaginative plot devices. Good Work
Shamrock220
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. I'm pretty new to this particular fandom, so its a little trial and error. I welcome any and all criticism to help my writing. Thanks for the great points. I'll keep them in mind. XD
[Report This]Date: 08/04/2011 12:42 PM Title: Misinformed
Very sad (especially the alternate ending) but very well done. The only problem is if they had a t'hy'la bond, Spock would have known that Jim wasn't lying. but still, great story.
Author's Response: Thanks very much. I kinda forgot that part when i wrote it and when i noticed it, I felt kind dumb. I'll be sure to remember that little detail when i write again. Thanks very much for your review!