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Reviewer: sierra scarlet Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/29/2011 1:45 AM Title: Chapter 1

Nice 5 and 1. Also love the voice of 5-year-old Kirk

Reviewer: muggy44 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/28/2011 6:57 PM Title: Chapter 1

I LOVED THEM . YOU CAN JUST SEE JIM DOING ALL OF THOSE THING'S . YOU REALLY GOT THEM DOWN. XOXOXOXOX

Reviewer: SORAL179 Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 06/28/2011 5:38 PM Title: Chapter 1

I love your little Tyke Kirk

Reviewer: ForgottenOne Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06/28/2011 4:16 PM Title: Chapter 1

Oh, goodness, this was awesome.  Congrats on your first five-and-one, and congrats for writing such a memorable piece!  I loved the constant of Jim fighting, and I also loved seeing Jim try to fight back the tears.  It was very moving.  I could see the growth in Jim even though his actions were the same.  And the last entry (age 25) was perfect.  What a way to surrender to authority!  Awesome work.  I've missed your writing while you were away.  Glad to see you back!



Author's Response:

TYTY. I'm glad to be back; the trip was LOUSY.

Reviewer: Vulcan Pearl Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06/28/2011 3:26 PM Title: Chapter 1

Cool, I love that you were able to find all those examples in the movie!  Though, did you put more time between the trial and the battle?  Or did you just add the few weeks so you wouldn't say 23 twice?

Again, cool story!



Author's Response:

I wsn't sure exactly how much time passes between the two, and I wanted to separate out Jim's age, so yeah, I just put a few weeks in () to mark the difference.

Reviewer: Wingstar102 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/28/2011 3:14 PM Title: Chapter 1

Very bittersweet. Well done! Will beg and grovel for more!

Love and cherries,
Wingstar

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