Date: 06/28/2011 4:16 PM Title: Chapter 1
Oh, goodness, this was awesome. Congrats on your first five-and-one, and congrats for writing such a memorable piece! I loved the constant of Jim fighting, and I also loved seeing Jim try to fight back the tears. It was very moving. I could see the growth in Jim even though his actions were the same. And the last entry (age 25) was perfect. What a way to surrender to authority! Awesome work. I've missed your writing while you were away. Glad to see you back!
TYTY. I'm glad to be back; the trip was LOUSY.
Date: 06/28/2011 3:26 PM Title: Chapter 1
Cool, I love that you were able to find all those examples in the movie! Though, did you put more time between the trial and the battle? Or did you just add the few weeks so you wouldn't say 23 twice?
Again, cool story!
I wsn't sure exactly how much time passes between the two, and I wanted to separate out Jim's age, so yeah, I just put a few weeks in () to mark the difference.