Date: 05/10/2011 9:24 PM Title: Chapter 1
This was good. My heart broke when I realized how innocent and scared Spock was, and I could only imagine. He went from kid to adult pretty fast on Genesis, with no time to process what happened. Your accounting seems very understandable and I was frustrated that the Vulcan healers were pushing him so hard to be 100% Vulcan. I'm glad Jim's there with him. You did a wonderful job with this, thank you so much.
Date: 05/10/2011 10:49 AM Title: Chapter 1
Aw... Good for Jim, showing that rude Vulcan where to get off. I always thought that the Vulcan healers must have been rubbing their little green hands in glee when Spock turned up for the faltorpan - "Yay!" they're thinking, "Finally we have the chance to turn this half-breed into a proper Vulcan." It's political, ideological and nasty. I really liked the paragraph about the consequences of Kirk's actions vis-a-vis Starfleet - that doesn't often get much mention.
Date: 05/10/2011 1:12 AM Title: Chapter 1
I loved this...great description of Jim's anxiety....his feelings for Spock. Spock who is so lonely and vunerable. He is like a child really...escaping through the window...adorable...and getting punished by the adults...and Jim is there to help him ...to see that he comes back to himself. That he comes home...Well done.