Date: 10/01/2010 4:45 AM Title: none
I wasn't sure if you meant for this fic to be a spoof of TOS or not, so I almost decided to include no comments about this stuff. On further thought, I realized that the comical elements weren't the main theme at all. Realizing this, I thought I should point out some issues that I noticed. Spock is a little OOC in this story, lots of sobbing, human curse words, mentions of a "God". Also, meditation is all about no distractions, so why is Spock kneeling to meditate? Kneeling is too uncomfortable for meditation. It's always done from a seated position.