Date: 01/20/2011 5:26 AM Title: Last Request
Oh I get to review this first...Wow..that was so beautiful and sad...I liked how you write how Jim is feeling add a few lines of the song..and then back to Jim. I love the poetry of your words, they are so descriptive and I found unique.
You say my name, but no longer does it sound like a prayer set free from your lips. LOVE THIS LINE....When Spock says Jim's name in private between them..(.good example is And the Children...turbolift scene)his voice is so soft and caring...like a blanket of warmth.
Your body is warm, and yet I’ve never felt so cold.
Ah...such a sad line......I can actually feel the icicles forming.
Again sad piece but so well written..thanks so much for sharing....