Date: 01/10/2011 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 1
I like those lines too. "I scream in agony for no one to hear." It reminds me so much of a favorite song of mine, the lines of it would describe Spock perfectly-"You have to cry without weeping, talk without speacking, scream without raising your voice..." That turmoil was captured nicely here.
Thanks dear friend. Your kind words makes me want to improve my writing skills.
Date: 01/10/2011 6:28 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wow! You have some very powerful imagery in this poem:
"I scream in agony for no one to hear" and "Make you stop breathing so I can catch my breath" Those were my favorite lines. I also really enjoy how you take the tone from anger to desperation. Wonderful stuff, my friend!
Thanks so much it means so much for you to comment...I really wrote this short poem in 10 minutes. Trying to feel how Spock is feeling as he tries to hurt Jim and then realizes he has suffered also...