Date: 07/16/2012 11:58 AM Title: Chapter 2
It's like you look into my head and wrote the story who is inside me....
Only the sceene if they meeting is too short. In my head it is very sweet.
I love it that McCoy is also here. Now beginns a part i don't imagine.
Very nice. Thank you.
Date: 02/04/2012 2:52 AM Title: Chapter 9
The last line is going to tickle the daylights out of me for the rest of the night. Glad to see this story continuing, although I'm slightly lost now. I'll have to re-read the first eight chapters. But you're doing pretty well, so keep it up!
Date: 01/22/2011 8:05 AM Title: Chapter 7
Oh, wow... that's terrible. No wonder Amanda and Leonard look like death warmed over. I guess you were hinting in the prior chapter but I'm dense and didn't catch on!
Not to worry the next chapter will have more backstory on just what happened to get Leonard and Amanda like that and will hopefully deal with any lingering questions.
Date: 01/18/2011 11:40 PM Title: Chapter 7
Oh! Oh oh oh hey I just read the first seven chapters of this and I love it! I don't care that you feel it's going on too long, I love it! More please! I can't get enough of Jim and James and Spock and Spock and Leonard and Amanda oh it's so good! I hope you update soon!
I'm glad you don't think it's too long, but it was only supposed to be like three chapters. Now it's going to be at least ten chapters and I'm already writing a companion story to go with it.
Date: 11/22/2010 7:22 AM Title: Chapter 6
I was following it when it was Spock and Jim Prime (love those guys) but you totally lost me back in the 24th century. I get that they're somehow all related to each other, but I kind of lost the plot there for a while.
Date: 11/07/2010 6:02 AM Title: Chapter 5
The image shifted and Admiral Chekov and Commodore Sulu appeared with Leonard and Spock.
“I trust his performance was satisfactory.”
Chekov smiled. “He won.”
Leonard had no doubt included this memory for visual reference in seeing a response he had never seen from his father before; and never would again.
Spock spit out his coffee on the floor in front of him.
Okay, now THAT is funny. Especially since I can imagine 70-whatever year old Spock still feeling humiliated about doing a spit-take. (I would just laugh.) Which just makes it funnier.
I highlighted a sentence above that really stopped me. I couldn't tell if it was all one scene or some sort of flashback scene transition thingy but I was so confused about what was going on that I kinda had to read the spit-take scene twice :P Maybe there was a hint earlier and I'm just slow on the old uptake. Is this a meld? The Nexus? When the scene opened I thought it was the Nexus but then I remembered that Spock really did have children.
It's like a meld with no physical melding involved. Remember that blue orb that Spock was talking about in chapter 3, these are all the memories it contains. So, both the readers and the characters are viewing them. And this whole idea wasn't a total rip off of the pensieve idea in Harry Potter I swear. *dodges sue happy lawyers*
Date: 11/07/2010 6:56 AM Title: Chapter 5
Spock looked over to the living room and shook his head as Amanda tried to teach Leonard a manoeuvre known simply as ‘The Moonwalk’.
Ha ha ha, somehow I knew it would be MJ*. He was THE BIGGEST star in the world when that movie came out. He was the KING. (Too bad he was totally nuts due to an abusive childhood. The more you know--speaking of 80's flashbacks.)
*okay, so a tiny part of me was freaking out thinking it might be Justin Bieber even though, wrong century. Is Biebermania over yet or do we have another season to go?
Date: 11/07/2010 6:49 AM Title: Chapter 5
YAY! A new chapter!
Very thought-provoking quote. Have to think about that one.
It's spelled "hors d'oeuvres". Google. Seriously. It's what I'd do.
Really, though, that word is begging for some Spelling Reform. Orderves. There. Fixt.
Yeah I really need to stop trusting Word with everything. But look the red line went away! That means it's finally spelled correctly and it's the word I want...or not. Thanks for the correction :).