Date: 07/10/2010 7:08 AM Title: Chapter 1
Neefty story! But I got to disagree with one thing here -- Vulcans are not cooler than humans, they are several degrees warmer, much the way cats are, only a bit hotter still. This was solid established in TOS and they didna change it in the movie. Dunno about the novel -- but Alan Dean Foster isn't exactly Theodore Sturgeon, so I don't shive a git what *he* changed. Feh.
on other hand, liked the story quite a lot!
Date: 07/07/2010 1:46 AM Title: Chapter 1
I loved it. I’m so glad to have a little more Spock Prime out there. It was really well written. I like how you jumped right in at a familiar point, and moved ahead in time without spending page upon page summarizing Jim’s new captaincy and how he’s settled. In. Instead of telling readers, you showed them, which is always the best way to do it.
There was a typo that threw me, just ‘cause it’s a prominent name. Nerada, should be Narada. Oh, and if you weren’t aware, Vulcans are cooler than humans (canon places them at 91F). It’s a common mix up. I’m just nitpicking. You barely even referenced temperature at all, just something about Spock Prime’s warmth, which doesn’t even mean you were suggesting he had a higher temperature.
Anyway, you packed a lot into a one-shot, but it worked really well. The emotion was all there. A very wonderful piece, I only wish there were more. I look forward to reading anything else you have written.
Thank you so much for your thoughts. I'm my own proof reader, so you know how that can go. I actually didn't realize Vulcans had a cooler body temperature. There are quite a few stories out there that make use of Spock's body temperature actually being higher than humans. Serves me right for not doing my own research, huh? :) People must assume that since Vulcan is hotter than Earth, so are the lifeforms that populate it. However, if you think about reptiles on Earth, they're cold blooded and where do they live? The desert. Anyway, thanks again!
Date: 07/06/2010 7:55 AM Title: Chapter 1
Oh this was lovely! Thank you so much for sharing.
Date: 07/06/2010 3:41 AM Title: Chapter 1
So sweet, so angsty. So well done and written. Makes me cry a bit; thanks for the moment.
Muy dulce, lleno de angst, perfectamente escrito y hecho; lograste hacerme llorar. Un trozo de lectura muy lindo.