Date: 12/06/2013 4:54 AM Title: Chapter 1
I could not keep reading this because I couldn't cope with your punctuation errors.
The word "your" as you are using it, is a contraction of the words "you" and "are", spelled "you're". The apostrophe replaces the letter "a". The word spelled "your" is a possessive pronoun, indicating ownership - ie, "this is your story, and you're doing a good job."
I'm sorry, but I found it so dislocating that I couldn't concentrate on the story.
Date: 01/28/2010 6:52 AM Title: Chapter 1
Mmm, yum, tasty part 2.
Fellow drummer: I grieve with thee
Greywolf, didn't know that band but damn, a drummer's a drummer--only another drummer can understand. Got to say, JTK in da nuverse'd make a *kickass* drummer -- but he'd probably insist on playin' lead guitar anyway ;-)>
Date: 01/14/2010 3:20 AM Title: Chapter 1
Mmm-hmm, yumminess, very tasty. I can see a few grammar etc. mistakes but they don't jar one out of the storyflow. Moar pls!!
the fact that you are even reviewing is just epic cause i love your work!!! so TYSM! *huggles via internets* and i hope you enjoy part 3! :D