Date: 09/13/2013 10:58 PM Title: Chapter 1
Kudos! This seemed to me to capture both characters really well. I am more of a TOS fan than Abrams - but I'm not an idiot - the new actors are hot as hell, and even if they do have a 'new' dynamic, there is stil a certain chemistry, which you nailed. I am just slightly uncertain about the last two paragraphs. For some reason, they don't seem to be quite as characteristic to me, but I'm not sure why. It might just be the word choices. Nothing wrong with it mind you - just not as PERFECT as the rest of the story. In particular - this could not be improved upon - brilliant, "There was just something about the captain that slipped past his nearly-impeccable self-control, and jabbed him straight into irrational violence.
At the moment, Spock was considering exactly this reaction to the captain's behaviour, while pinning Kirk to the wall of the corridor, a few inches off the ground, with one arm pressed against the captain's neck, and the other hand gripping the wrist for better leverage. Kirk's face was a brilliant red, tinging toward blue around the lips, and he continued to struggle weakly against Spock -- or at least, Spock had thought it was struggling until he noticed that the leg he was using to prop his captain off the floor was butted against a rather reactive part of the human's anatomy -- and react it had." Thank you for sharing this story.
Date: 09/07/2011 9:57 AM Title: Chapter 1
Just reading what you wrote about the story, made r03;r03;me feel hungry.
(Rubbing my hands with delight) Now, I want to see the menu!
(strident and screeching as a combination of half frog and half a cat)
I do not understand it, really ... I think I'll have to check again (raises an eyebrow)