Reviews For Not the One
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Reviewer: marksonpaper Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/28/2010 7:59 PM Title: Chapter 1

That's the end?! Aw, Spock, hun, you moron, bless your heart. :(

 

Good jod, loved it!

Reviewer: blue-seme Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11/21/2009 3:47 AM Title: Chapter 1

This demands a sequel! I love this.. it made me shiver... I hope to see some more! :)

Reviewer: Greywolf the Wanderer Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/21/2009 1:16 AM Title: Chapter 1

Woo, I *like* this.  Short, and nasty.  But you know, there is a fundamental error in Spock's logic -- just as in TOS there was when he went to Gol.  This is so good, and it hurts, it makes me want to read Jim's reaction.  I can't see him agreeing with Spock's decision, it seems like a red flag would be to a bull, nies?

Mind, that's my reaction, yer mileage may vary ;-)>  But I can so see blue-eyed Jim refusing to accept this and finding a way in there and, well, yeah...

Whoo!  Writes more, pls!!

Greywolf, who looooves angst way too much, heh

Reviewer: Hypatia Kosh Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/20/2009 8:48 AM Title: Chapter 1

I don't know if you're old enough to remember Babylon 5, but your title reminded me of when Sinclair confronted Zathras on Babylon 4 and, after seeming for a moment to recognize him, Zathras just clucks and says, "Not the one." "Not the one? Not the one what?"

This is a very tightly written short work. I like your writing a lot. You asked for constructive criticism so I'm wracking my brain. I have to admit the bit about Kirk being a rambling man is a bit cliché, and I'm disappointed that Spock thinks so. If anything, Kirk is never who he appears to be. /end characterization rant. No really, I quite enjoyed this. More vignettes to come?

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