Date: 11/13/2009 10:21 PM Title: Chapter 1
It's so beautiful.
You did a great work with Spock's POV: yes, he is quite cold when he wants to, he is damn-it-logical, but he is certainly not "emotionless", and I could feel him through your words.
The "moment that could have been" was brilliant, and Spock's possible reaction to this possible discovery… guh.
And also the circle this story makes with Jim's words.
It certainly hurts, but, well, in a good way, I guess. And you have a wonderful way with words. This text is… breathing.
Oh, and I didn't find any e-mail address or anything else to write to you, so I'll ask here. May I please translate this fic into Russian? I will credit you and the original story, of course. It's just so beautiful and I have to share it with other people.
Hi Verit, just wanted to make sure you got my email response? If not, please tell me and I'll re-send it!
Date: 09/27/2009 10:07 PM Title: Chapter 1
Oh wow... I grieve with Spock, having to go through all of Jim's illusions ("believe"). That should tell him he isn't just one of those mere 'facets of love' to Jim. I hope the whole thing (impossible relationships) doesn't tax Jim too much in the long run, but on the other hand I wish it would tax him, just to realize the truth: they are gladly impossible.
Reminds me of the poem "The Evening Star" by M. Eminescu, where it ends hopelessly with a "what do you care if it's me, or another?" - it's always intrigued me, that question by which the character rightly questions the other's level of awareness. It took me a long time to understand that question. Interestingly enough, the poem has sometimes been said to have Star Trek elements (though I can't be sure what other people are referring to, when saying thus... they might just mean the Cosmic Travel aspect of the story, but they might also have the intuition of the deeper current of existential questions such as these).