Date: 07/25/2009 10:54 PM Title: Chapter 1
Oh no, I'm glad you wrote this fanfic, no need to stick to reviews. I've always wondered about this very scene... Spock's feelings when hearing Jim say that about Edith Keeler. It broke me too, in that episode: how could he not see what's beside him? I've always wondered about the true meaning of "Edith Keeler must die" - lol. Some spelling errors indeed: the possessive is spelled with an apostrophe, "Jim's", "Spock's", etc. Then you have an adverb, "professionally" instead of "professional". Peoples are always spelled like countries in English, with a capital: Vulcan, the Vulcan. Like Sweden, Swedish. Everything else seems correct at this point, and very well phrased, I think. Well done!