Date: 11/19/2013 9:26 AM Title: Homecoming II, Electric Boogaloo
Oh, thank heavens, you made it right in the end. I was afraid this was going to end really sadly.
I love this! I want to read more, all about adopting Lejiba ( were Spock & Kirk together then?) and having Grayson (love how you casually mention, "Spock had him," - I'm combining reviews here, I read Homecoming & went straight to Homecoming II - I want to hear about their decision to have another child, and his birth, and their challeges and his development - what will his telepathic abilities end up as?)
Your characterisation is spot on, you get them exactly right. Your spelling and grammar are perfect (people who can't spell don't realize how important this is!) and you really know how to tell a good story.
I hope you continue to write and post here. Thank you so much for writing and sharing this beautiful story with us all.
Date: 09/09/2013 11:59 PM Title: Homecoming II, Electric Boogaloo
I was halfway through a flustered explanation about the special type of cuddle daddies have sometimes when Spock pulled out of me, launching into a mini lecture about how the known majority of mature mammalian beings practice sexual intercourse for pleasure or procreation. He went on to describe in some detail to a fascinated Gray how various species of interest around the galaxy mated. It put me off sex for almost a week.
I'm absolutely dying laughing, also, imagining Spock relegated to the sofa for that little performance and griping about illogical human cultural taboos.
Date: 09/09/2013 4:10 AM Title: Homecoming
I love how he was eating the octopus at the restaurant for revenge.
Also: "Fuck my head" has got to be the funniest "meld pls?" I've ever read. I was pretending it was Original!Them even though you said it wasn't, because I'm annoying like that, but that line was definitely Pine!Kirk :P
Date: 09/09/2013 3:18 AM Title: Homecoming
I attack a plate of garlicky grilled baby octopus with spiteful glee. She was sure it would give me a flashback and wanted to avoid a seafood restaurant altogether, but she's wrong and chewing on each and every sucker is a vindictive kind of justice that's as ridiculous as it is rubbery and delicious.
My favorite part. Farf is here and says it's awesome, too.
"Jim, I love you, very much and you've been a wonderful friend to me over the years, but I said this to you a long time ago and think it needs repeating: If you hurt Spock, I'll rip off your balls. Do we understand each other?"
Aaaaaand, cut. Great way to end a chapter.
Date: 12/03/2012 4:58 AM Title: Homecoming
I really, really love this story. It is so sweet and special. I love the characterization of Spock as the patient, gentle father, and both of the kids are wonderful, too. Kirk, of course, is stuck initially in that snarky adolescent attitude of his, but I really like how he grows into the relationship. Well done!
Date: 08/23/2012 4:20 PM Title: Homecoming
Read straight through--didn't review..oh golly, look--a pome!
No seriously, discourteous but complimentary. I fell into an Altered State. You have the gift of--what's a fancy word for "making you feel like you're right there"? (naah don' give me the ol' willing-suspension-of-disbelief--this is more)
Your Creature is terrifying.
Date: 08/20/2012 8:27 PM Title: Homecoming II, Electric Boogaloo
I loved this ..... Your writing is absolutely wonderful and I love that you explore the first person POV.
It's funny, normally I can very rarely accept that Kirk would contentedly live a life of domesticity as a desk-bound Admiral with Spock. If somebody had told me the premise of this story before I had read it - that Kirk would wake up missing 17 years of his memory, with most of his memories of captaining the Enterprise gone - and still decide to remain with Spock on Earth rather than trying again to captain a ship, I would have dismissed the premise as being completely OOC. I'm probably letting TOS Kirk influence the way I see Reboot Kirk too much, and I love that you implicitly considered the differences between them - especially when Kirk regresses back to a child and you describe him as hating space.
I'm still not sure if I completely buy Kirk accepting his new life so easily at the end of Homecoming I, but you made it work, and this story -- and your characterization of Kirk -- was amazing!! I love your original characters too - Gray & Lejiba were awesome, and Pui-Shan was annoying in a great way.
Thanks so much for posting it! I'm going back to reading it again now!
Date: 08/20/2012 6:41 PM Title: Homecoming
I first read this on your lj, I think, and was blown away! Amazing writing and actually none cliche ending.
This story has stuck with me as few other have. It's not.... As obviously tragic as some stories, but when I thought about it I really really felt bad for Kirk. He wakes up with no memory and old. Yes, he has an amazing family life, but in his mind he's in his mid-twenties. I can relate. Everything he dreamed of experiencing and achiving.... It's no longer in his reach. He can't remember it so it's like it never happened. Sure he can read about it like in a story, but he'll never feel like he was captian. All the amazing friendships, beings, experiences, they're gone. And his youth has been taken. His body. He's old now (comparatively).
I see you have a sequel up... That's great! I hope it fixes everything!
Date: 08/20/2012 5:33 AM Title: Homecoming II, Electric Boogaloo
Such a wonderful story. When Jim started to lose his memories again, it reminded me of early onset dementia, and how very horrible and painful it is for those left behind. I wish it really could be cured by taking a dip in a pond on a faraway planet. From that point on, the story flowed seamlessly, again capturing every voice accurately. You managed to create new characters who seemed like old friends, particularly the children. It might not have worked to explain how or why Jim's memory came back in detail, but I would like to know. I love the story as it is though. huge kudos.