"what shampoo do you use?" = greatest line ever

Author's Response: I know right?

First of all: I feel for your computer situation. I've been working off of my iPad for a while now and it's frustrating, I can't imagine working with an iPod.

I though the amount of emotion displayed was perfectly fine, his mate is in danger, that instinct should trump even Surak.
I did however feel that this chapter felt a bit rushed towards the end. Still amazing though, keep it up!

Author's Response: Thanks a bunch, dear. That screen is so tiny x.x. I'm glad I have someone who understands. Making Spock combat his emotions, while at the same time feeling them and being confused, seems to be working out for me. I felt the same way. My parents would've been home soon though and I didn't want to keep anyone waiting any longer. I'll try and put a little more thought and effort into the next one. Thanks for your thoughts!

So yeah, I'm a sappy romantic, but i'm also a huge sucker for angst, especially the there-will-under-circumstances-be-a-happy-ending-in-the-traditional-sense kind.
REALLY excited to see where this goes

So I'm crying in the best way right now, this is absolutely moving, I love it so much. And I also love the first quote for this chapter because it's so true.
Jim's anger in this chapter reminded me, for some reason, about an AFI fic I read years ago where Davey's dying and he's so angry at the world.
I am so in love with your Spock, he has just the right amount of caring and compassion to be supportive, without being too out of character.
So just all around love.

This chapter absolutely broke my heart. I can't imagine anything worse than having to watch your mother like that. The singer in my band had brain cancer twice before the age of sixteen (thankfully operable and leaving her with full mental functionality after the surgeries both times) I can't even think about what I'd do if it relapsed and she was like this. I can't even imagine what Jim's going through, I lost my mother in October, but it was a car accident. I can't even imagine having to watch her die slowly like that.
On a lighter note: I love the end of the chapter hardcore, and the bit about him lighting e gym on fire made me think of Buffy, which made me imagine Jim fighting vampires in a miniskirt, which was hilarious.
I absolutely love this fix.

Oh dear, they're in trouble now!
I've laughed so hard all the way through this, it really is great

Author's Response:

Thanks!  Glad you're getting lols.

So I was originally hesitant, as I often am, to read this fic because i've seen so many incarnations of juvie!fics (not in this fandom, but I read a lot of bandslash and it's really popular there) and I wasn't really interested in this one.
However, as I often am, I am glad I did read this because I absolutely love it. 

The intellectual discussion is refreshing an impressive. And while I've always been more of a physics and sociology kind of girl, i find myself enjoying philosophy for the first time (before this, I always found it sort of pointless because, for all the debating, there will never be an answer to the most important questions)
I also love the dynamic, ever-evolving relationship between Kirk and Spock as well as kirk's interaction with the rest of the group.
Your portrayal of the dystopic society is intensely fascinating, especially as seen from the perspective of "troubled" youth. From the crumbling propaganda in the beginning, to Dr. Noel's attempts at, for lack of a better word, brainwashing, and the brief discussion of politics, the outside world that we only get a peek at is accurately vast and complex, as it should be. 
I always felt that the near-utopic, ideal world Trek is set in is kind of a far-fetched idea and you've done wonders with the more likely postsible-future

However, I would like to point out: intellectuals can listen to punk too, I would consider myself a burgeoning intellectual and I happen to love punk rock

Author's Response: Aww, I'm glad you gave it a try! Thank you :) My understanding of physics is pretty shoddy, so feel free to to correct me if you see any mistakes;) I'm glad the philosophy rants weren't too random. I tried to keep my nerdiness on minimum, but I needed the Birth of Tragedy thing to to foreshadow other stuff. I will say nothing of philosophy here except that philosophy is first and foremost a study based in logic (even when it debates things like the just state and/or the principles of jurisprudence, which are human constructs, as opposed to philosophy of math and science) It actually always kinda bugs me about Star Trek that they don't seem to realize logic is a science/techne/subject matter (like geometry) and treat it as an opposite of emotion...but I know philosophy is not everybody's cup of tea, so I'm glad that you didn't just skip over those parts in boredom :) Yeah,I know what you mean about the Trek world. As much as I love the whimsical, optimistic message of Star Trek, it almost seems TOO happy, you know? It's like I'm watching and my brain is going..."Nobody should be this happy and perfect all the time, there must be something else going on here." I LOVE punk rock music. I love everything from the old school stuff like the Sex Pistols, The Damned, The Jam, The Buzzcocks and all those 77 bands to the California punk of the 80's (Bad Religion and Black Flag FTW!)all the way to what few underground, obscure bands are around now (Black Lips, Wet Dreams, etc.) My comment was NOT supposed to be a dig at punk but a praise of subversive political philosophy, from someone who loves both. Thank you for commenting so that I could clarify that. Thank you so much for reading and your long, well-thought out review. I hope the fic does not disappoint and constructive crit is always welcome :)

Secretive!Jim is secretive.
I absolutely love this, Spock's panicky awkwardness with human culture is adorable and hilarious. Spock being "from Fiji" sort of reminds me of the part in Little Nicky when he says he's from "the deep south" and everyone just sort of nods even though it doesn't make sense.
Great (as always) so far

Author's Response:

Yeah, well Fiji doesn't make sense, but it's a long way from iowa.