Reviewer: Tech_Duinn Signed
Chapter 2: Chapter 2
Oh, wow. This story is just lovely. I love Jim's POV, (the characterization is dead-on) and the internal conflict you have him experiencing. It's angsty without being melodramatic (Fine, fine line that you've managed to skirt beautifully) and I feel like it's ... right. If that makes any sense. I feel like this is exactly what Shatner's Kirk would have felt during those long, drawn out years of pining away for Spock during the five year mission, yet it fits with nu!Kirk seamlessly.
The one negative I have it that your formatting is really hard to read. Those narrative paragraphs are so long that I kept losing my place. In fact, the first time that I clicked on this story I immediately turned away because I thought the formatting was an indication of your writing abilities, when clearly it isn't.
But, really, just a wonderful story. I look forward to seeing an update.