Date: 04/10/2018 6:49 PM Title: Chapter 1
I enjoyed this story quite a lot, and I really loved your insight that Chris Pike and Number One are the mirror images of Spock's own father and mother, in a way that might help to correct Sarek's and Amanda's deficiencies. I've read a ton of TOS fan fiction, and this is the first time I've ever seen anyone make that connection, so a thousand thanks for giving us a new insight into a character we've known and loved for fifty years!
Date: 04/10/2018 3:37 AM Title: Chapter 1
I liked your story. Using Pike's perspective is really unusual, and I'm not sure I've read one from his before. Starting early before Kirk and then ending with Kirk was also a nice touch. It would have been nice to have a bit more story, but I like what you did.