Date: 11/16/2017 10:22 AM Title: Chapter 1
I do not think the present tense third person narration distracts from the story as one of the other reviwers said. I feel that it pulls me into the scene as if I was looking over Spock's shoulders at what he is creating. I think it is a well executed little sketch of pain and friendship and of how the second may be able to sooth the first.
Thank you, I'm glad you think so! Spock's grief over the loss of Vulcan is kind of skated over in canon, so I wanted to explore that.