Date: 06/26/2017 8:26 PM Title: Chapter 2
This is gorgeous, hon!
I've had a lot of sensual and sexual experiences that weren't about orgasm; many of them weren't even about physical pleasure but were about connection, trust, loss of self-consciousness, and tapping into the Immanence. I almost never see such things in fan fiction, and it's a great joy to find it here.
I knew when I first saw you that you could be a fabulous writer; it's been thrilling to watch you find your feet and go on to produce pieces that are fascinating or lovely or even fascinatingly lovely. :-)
Date: 06/26/2017 8:24 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is so beautifully written! I would say that to anyone who could write like this, and knowing that English isn't your first language makes it all the more remarkable.
I love how subtle the whole piece is, how well you understand both characters, and how well Kirk understands what's going on with Spock. I love it that Spock is NOT human and that Kirk gets this and treats Spock as the person he IS and not as just another human lover.
I love it that non-pon farr sexuality is difficult for Spock, because letting go is not something he knows how to do or even wants to do, given his desire to be fully Vulcan, plus he worries that if he lets go, he could endanger Kirk. I love how flexible Kirk is in working within Spock's limitations and how he's not being judgmental about how Spock is.
I love this paragraph: Spock's breathing was deep, slow and perfectly rhythmical. In a human it would have signified serenity. In Spock, it meant that he was actively controlling his body, making it a slave to his conscious will. Locking it down, securing it.
I love your comparing Spock's losing control to Kirk's being helpless; it shows that you and Kirk both understand the core of these men.
And now I have to go read it again, because it was subtle enough that I may not have gotten all the nuances the first time. :-)
Date: 06/25/2017 7:07 PM Title: Chapter 2
I loved this story. Being more into relationships than the actual sex act, you managed to satisfy both areas. I like in command Kirk and moreo virginal Spock, and that is a good part of what you have created. Yet somehow you seem to give their physical relationship a touch of alienness that is not usually seen.
You might want to check the 2nd chapter, however. It appears that there is a repeat section of the text, and this is too nice to mess up with a small technical error.
Ah, thank you! I've edited away the strange extra text.
I'm glad you liked it, and I'm happy that my intentions (love, a touch of D/s but with a decidedly alien taste, focusing on the relationship) seemed to have come through in the text. Thanks you for the reivew! <3