Date: 11/27/2015 11:14 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is a beautiful story - really, a favourite on my list, I promise - I do ponder a bit at the mention that the concert was for all the senses - when, in the same line, you mention visuals obscured -maybe, a tad more explanation or a different way of saying it - but I totally get that you meant that the visuals would come from the individual's life, when they heard the music. I also think, that if you do a 2nd chapter (PLEASE!!!??), you could reiterate that Spock is not getting his emotions confused for Jim's - he is aware of his separately to Jim's regarding the 'I did not know - what you meant to me' line - though, again, I get that Jim's mind has helped Spock better understand thoughts and feelings that he could not before tie down to a specific cause... I REALLY Love this story, & would love a heart to heart after the concert, with some more shared emotion and hand holding mushyness - that isn't mushy in actuality, but is Beautiful, by the way...
Thank you for your lovely comment. It was the first chapter of a longer story that got way out of hand and will need much more time than I have right now so a second chapter isn't planned until summer. Btw, I had to rewrite this A LOT to make it behave for the OMS challenge on tumblr. I am always intrigued by mind melds and like everyone else, love to speculate what would happen if they did it recreationally before they got together. And what better way for them to find each other than listening to music.
Date: 11/26/2015 1:30 AM Title: Chapter 1
I enjoyed your story. It was so descriptive that I felt like I could experience the music myself. It's good to see you writing again.
Thank you! I've been posting mainly on AOS But iam now reposting here. I'm glad you enjoyed it.