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Reviewer: mary100859 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07/20/2015 8:07 PM Title: Chapter 2

I like this verision much better than the other one where Spock was dead. Thanks for the second chapter. 

Reviewer: PaintedBird Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/20/2015 3:06 PM Title: Chapter 1

I think you made a good effort here, but I have some issues with the story overall.  Most significantly, this is the JIm Kirk of the no win scenario, the Jim Kirk who doesn't believe that there is no other option.  If you were going to bring him to the point of murdering Spock himself, I think it would have helped to show that he had made other efforts to avoid doing this before he would even consider harming Spock in any way.  I look forward to seeing your work in the future as you grow and develop as a writer.  Good luck!



Author's Response:

Yeah I know the story wasn't perfect, but it was an idea in my head that I basically jotted on paper in like ten minutes and I was too lazy to write in more detail. I just copied it from my paper version (except the background part. That wasn't there until the typed version). It's not my best work, but my short stories never are my best work. You're welcome to read anything else, and I can always improve in the future. 



Author's Response:

Yeah I know the story wasn't perfect, but it was an idea in my head that I basically jotted on paper in like ten minutes and I was too lazy to write in more detail. I just copied it from my paper version (except the background part. That wasn't there until the typed version). It's not my best work, but my short stories never are my best work. You're welcome to read anything else, and I can always improve in the future. And thank you for your feedback :)



Author's Response:

Sorry I was trying to add something but it just repeated the response. Sorry about the repeated response :/

 

Reviewer: laustic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07/19/2015 8:36 AM Title: Chapter 2

I'm so glad for how this ended with Spock being alive!

Reviewer: urmeli2007 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07/17/2015 4:52 PM Title: Chapter 1

Kritik?

Nur das die story zu kurz ist
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Ich würde mit Kapitel 2 wieder glücklich werden.

das leben ist oft traurig genug, mach mich/uns doch noch einmal Glücklich....

Reviewer: laustic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07/17/2015 1:51 AM Title: Chapter 1

Wow, this was so incredibly sad and heartbreaking.

Reviewer: SORAL179 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/16/2015 6:48 AM Title: Chapter 1

I do not know how you are going to get out of this but I await chapter two 

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