Date: 08/29/2014 9:56 AM Title: III... their rest in you.
That was BEAUTIFUL! I loved the innocence of Spock at first, and then the knowledge and the peace, and then visiting the planet that embodied that peace. You really have a way with words. I adored this work and I'm so glad I got to read it. Thank you so much!
:-) Thank you for reviewing, ForgottenOne. I am glad you liked this piece so much. Bless you!
:-) Thank you for reviewing, ForgottenOne. I am glad you liked this piece so much. Bless you!
Date: 08/29/2014 2:04 AM Title: III... their rest in you.
Thank you so much for this utterly beautiful final chapter. There is so much in here. so much truth. Looking at their relationship now I feel deeply touched at the way in which Jim waited for the physical completion which is a fundamental part of his being. He waited without fretting, without needing, revelling in what they had and finding all he could want in their union; he accepted what Spock could give freely and when it was Spock to desire the completion of their union on the physical level, he gently and gladly complied.
And I much treasure the idea that a love like that would irradiate right to the fringes of the galaxy, shining and illuminating and generating the wish to understand and follow.
"May your path be straight and lead to the All", that's easily one of the most beautiful blessings I have ever read. May it be true for all of us.
I am so pleased this chapter resonated for you, angelocustode. :-) Thanks for leaving your reflections!
Date: 08/29/2014 1:28 AM Title: III... their rest in you.
Yay, you finished it! I liked it. :) I think you were definitely in line with the idea of the challenge, too, though I would have never imagined it going quite in this way on my own. Really neat! :)
You're welcome! Thanks for throwing down the gauntlett... If you've got any other ideas, I'm up for being challenged... ;-)
Date: 08/29/2014 12:57 AM Title: III... their rest in you.
This was so lovely, and so, dare I say, transcendent! :) So much love, and depth and warmth. I loved the fact that their bond was recognized as the powerful and glorious thing that it is. I'm a geologist, and enjoyed the use of "selenite". The physical appearance of that mineral fits so beautifully with the pure and peaceful culture you describe here. So well done, and for angelocustode, too! :) -C
Ah! I'm glad you picked up on the selenite thing - that was quite deliberate. I love selenite - I have a crystal carved in a spiral and was thinking of it as I wrote that pericope.
Thanks so much for leaving your thoughts, Cate. I greatly appreciate your feedback!
Date: 07/20/2014 6:41 AM Title: II. ...restless, until they find...
I feel that your difficulties show only in the first part of this chapter. After the intense understanding the two share in the first chapter and especially after you have shown us Spock as so deeply dedicated to Kirk and so sure about the eternal nature of his love, the Spock who completely misunderstands Jim's words becomes slightly OOC. From the moment they are both back on the Enterprise all your usual intensity is back and I don't think you need to worry about your creative force. I am particularly fond of the way Jim looks for the water and the tiny plant, to save and to liberate what Spock has tried to kill and contain. And the most beautiful moment for me was when Jim lifts Spock from his selfrecriminating to make him see that his heart and his mind is still full of nothing else but welcoming love.
Trust yourself, keep writing and composing!!!
Thanks for your encouragement, angelocustode. I suppose my justification for the off-the-beam Spock is that he got completely locked into his own fear, fear of his desire... So in many ways he was, literally, out of character. And came to know that only the painful way...
Working on the third and final chapter now.
Date: 07/19/2014 6:23 PM Title: II. ...restless, until they find...
I couldn't read this chapter. I guess you felt you had to follow canon, so something really bad or really stupid had to happen here. I don't read "why Spock went to Gol" stories, but since it was you, and since I'd loved Chapter 1 so very much, I started this chapter. Nope, I still can't read "why Spock went to Gol" stories. This shouldn't be construed as any sort of slur on your story.
Since Roddenberry didn't like Nimoy, and his first suggestion for what would happen to Spock in TMP was that Spock would have gone insane, I always figure that Roddenberry was the one who went insane, and I just ignore this bit of canon. :-)
thanks for leaving your thoughts on this story. I am sorry you choose not to read Gol stories, and also understand. They're not my particular favourite, either.
In this case, I used canon and the Gol arc to make a point: through melding with V'Ger Spock in this story comes to understand what sex is really all about and why it might be something beings desire to engage in... That's what the story explores: the question of sex, transcendence and love which takes our boys beyond both.
I know you stopped reading at one point. Perhaps you could pick up the last couple of scenes which are the reunion meld, and then the bonding ceremony on Vulcan?
I also hope you'll come back for the third chapter, in which we finally do bring the guys together. Do you like/read pon farr stories? ;-) not that I want to give much away...
Date: 07/19/2014 5:27 PM Title: II. ...restless, until they find...
Die Schönheit deiner Geschichte ist die Andersartikeit!!
Eine Wohltat für meine Seele, eine schöne Zeit, mit Vergessen der eigenen Probleme. Was für ein schönes Geschenk. Ich danke dir sehr und das es eine TOS story ist für mich auch ein großes Geschenk und wie besonders du sie geschrieben hast.
mögest du weiter dein Inspiration mit uns teilen
Vielen dank fuer deine Komentare, Ulla!
Date: 07/19/2014 5:09 PM Title: I. And our hearts are...
That was completely gorgeous! I feel like this is the K/S chapter I've been wanting to read for the past 45 years, one that's about affection, connnection, trust, and sharing, one where bodies are not terribly relevant.
I was interested to see you have Kirk think about transcendence and have Spock speak of the divine. To me, it seems that the part of sex that isn't about the physical is about the desire for connection with another and about a desire to feel fully alive and in the moment. Surely a mind meld must be the best possible connection with another, so what they're doing in this chapter would have to be better than sex.
Wow! Thanks for saying that. Yep - definitely thinking along the same lines!
Date: 07/19/2014 12:02 PM Title: II. ...restless, until they find...
My dear Ashaya TReldai,
This is so intensiv, I couldn`t stop reading. And I´m very happy that you continued this story.
I'm happy they came together at last.
Very good. ;-)
Bless you, Sera! There's another chapter to go...
Date: 07/19/2014 11:37 AM Title: II. ...restless, until they find...
I refuse to beg for reviews, but I give them freely, and would have reviewed this story had you asked or had you not. I understand about artistic crises and how you can struggle for the simplest words to put down. I have been there myself. I think you're doing a great job getting this out. I loved the back story of what happened to Jim when Spock went to Gol and how far down he went. I was glad to see them get back together, although Spock is a dense one, isn't he? It was a great story. If this be the end, it's a wonderful end. Thanks so much.
Thank you again, ForgottenOne. I deeply appreciate both your reviews, and the fact that so often you can be relied upon to leave them!
Date: 07/19/2014 11:03 AM Title: II. ...restless, until they find...
Oh my, thats so heartbreaking.
I've read the half of chapter two.
I must write now.
I'm crying for Jim... It's so sad...
I hope its going better...
Now I must read on.
It gets better...
Date: 07/19/2014 2:53 AM Title: II. ...restless, until they find...
It's so great to see you getting back to this story! :) I was surprised to see you put the whole Gol and TMP thing in here -- interesting choice. I love the imagry of Jim prying at the doors to get to Spock. It's always so sad to read stories that deal with Gol, so I'm glad you had them get together in the same chapter that the sad things happened. It means that I can go to bed with warm and fuzzy thoughts. :)
Awww. Thanks for your note, sunshine. Well, the challenge *does* ask that there be no sex involved in the forming of the bond... I really wanted to draw that out - as you see at the end of this chapter.
I guess that was what was so interesting to me about your challenge: the question of meld vs sex and transcendence and destiny...
sending you warm and fuzzy thoughts, Ashaya.
Date: 05/15/2014 1:43 AM Title: I. And our hearts are...
That's a record: I was moved to tears before even starting to read the story! I was so touched at reading your dedication to me - thank you so much!!!
I love the path Jim's thoughts are taking in this story, the realisation of what he is truely looking for in his encounters and of the reasons why in the end he always finds them less than complete. I absolutely adore Spock's quiet dedication, the depth of his love that he is prepared to give freely and eternally, no matter what Jim's reaction would be.
The awkwardness of their conversation on the observation desk is endearing, so realistic, so believable. And their meeting in the meld is breathtaking. AshayaTReldai at her best! Thank you so much. And thanks to sunshine for the interesting challenge.
Awwww! I hope you like chapter 2 as much as chapter 1... And it's a delight to dedicate this one to you, angelocustode!
Date: 05/14/2014 8:02 PM Title: I. And our hearts are...
I'm sorry Ashaya.
I'm to tired to read the chapter to the end. Tomorrow I'll continue.
(It's midnight here now)
Jims thought are very interessting and I can really imagine the two on that table with the food between them and talking about sex ;-)
Hi Sera, did you get through it? I've just posted chapter 2... Thanks for leaving your thoughts.
Date: 05/14/2014 4:50 PM Title: I. And our hearts are...
Wow! First of all, let me say it is so exciting to see that you are taking up one of my challenges. I love your work, and now you're doing this story... it's all just very exciting. :) I really like what you've written so far, and I look forward to seeing what will come next.
:-) I'm glad you like it, sunshine. I've just posted chapter 2. I hope it meets your expectations for this challenge!
Date: 05/14/2014 12:01 PM Title: I. And our hearts are...
Oh, that was beautiful. I love the challenge and I love even more the way you're approaching it. I can't wait to see where this goes. I love the way you describe the characters' minds and the glory and holiness that is their love. Wonderful job!
Thanks, ForgottenOne. Thanks for your support and encouragement.