Date: 11/30/2013 3:31 PM Title: Chapter 1
Awww - very nice, very sweet. I'll admit to the tiniest of confusion at the beginning about which Spock was sitting there, but we'll just call that reader error. I did find a tiny typo in case you want to fix it: 'an unforgivable violated.' I'm assuming you intended 'violation.'
I must say I really love your descriptive writing - you make great word choices but more than that you just put them together so creatively such as 'a trembling sense of calm'. Thank you so much for posting this, I truly enjoyed it.