Date: 11/03/2013 7:56 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is an interesting piece of free-verse poetry.To me it seems a bit unfinished, which is probably due to your style of not using full stops or paragraphs. It's just a style thing anyway, so not important :) The ending was very nice and surprising, and leaves the reader hoping that one day the door will open...
Thanks. I suppose I didn't bother with punctuation for 2 reasons; I get it wrong (!) and because it's meant to make a person think (the poem!) - Thanks for the compliments!