Date: 05/08/2014 6:12 AM Title: Chapter 1
Yes. it is quite clear that you know all about rain, heavy rain, repeated rain from personal experience. But after those heavy, sudden rainfalls the world seems clearer and all the more beautiful, like the company of a caring friend after hours of doubting lonelyness.
I live at the edge of a temperate rainforest and wrote this story last year when the constant rain became an issue for me. We received our total usual rainfall for the year by mid-July and the raininess was clearly getting to me. I guess it showed! Thanks for your comments!
Date: 09/02/2013 10:30 PM Title: Chapter 1
i would love a sequel of this story :)
Thank you. I don't currently have plans for a sequel as I am working on another project but will certainly return to this if my muse whispers something interesting in my ear. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Date: 08/24/2013 4:39 PM Title: Chapter 1
You have some really wonderful vivid imagery in here and a great Spock POV. I love 'Beyond the porch was a verdant, rich ecosystem teaming with life, but he could find no pleasure in it as he had in the past.' and I also loved this, 'By nature, he disliked chaos and uncertainty although he had often experienced those conditions.' and the rest that went with it. You have a wonderful story going on here. I don't think it is the full story though. It needs to have more reconciliation than you've got, and it needs Jim POV. (Now - this is just me being all pushy - there's nothing WRONG with the story lol!) By reconciliation, I'm not talking sex per se, but something that lets us see what conflict and POV Jim has and how the two of them reconcile it. I WANT to know that. You've just wet my whistle with this. It's a teaseeeeee. (grin)
I really apreciate your reading and comments. It is easy to get the imagery right when the landscape is all around you. I had intended this story as a one shot geared primarily to work through some of MY issues with the rainy spring and summer we are having, but I found that I did like it more than I had expected. At this time, my fannish writing is limited while I try to complete a big project, but if the spirit moves me I may return to this one. The only thing I am working on for the archives at this time is a follow up to Monster. If you liked that one, maybe that will suffice for the time being. Thanks again.
Date: 07/26/2013 10:27 PM Title: Chapter 1
This story is so moody. Your images of a storm (great metaphor by the way) are so vivid I can see them. I like how you drove Spock to his emotional crisis, increasing the tension. All in all, you failed to convince me rain is a bad thing. Great job!
I have to admit we've had so much rain in the past months that I am just obsessed by it and have had a lot of experience with storms, too, so I guess it was good practical experience for writing about a storm. Glad that you liked the story.
Date: 07/25/2013 2:21 PM Title: Chapter 1
That captures very well a feeling most people experience, that uncertainty that eats at your soul while you are waiting for someone who is late. Very well expressed.
The trigger for this story was standing at a gas station pumping gas and having the wind blow the smell of rain as I did it. We have had a tremendous amount of rain since February (almost an average years's worth here in July) and I've begun to find it oppressive. It rained yesterda, it's raining today, it's going to rain tomorrow. But being able to parallel Spock's anxiety about the meeting and the eminent storm was an interesting exercise that I enjoyed. Thanks for being such a loyal reader and commenter.
Date: 07/25/2013 4:00 AM Title: Chapter 1
Oh! You can't just leave it there! I want to know what happens next!
Sorry. For me, this was a one shot story. Please feel free to imagine your own ending, and thanks for reading and commenting.