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Reviewer: Ms Moxie09 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11/13/2014 6:42 PM Title: Chapter 1

Love this

Reviewer: Ishtar205 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/06/2014 5:51 PM Title: Chapter 1

Nice^^

Reviewer: space_cat Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/12/2014 2:00 AM Title: Chapter 1

Very good story, wish there was more to read!

Reviewer: angelocustode Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10/15/2013 11:20 AM Title: Chapter 1

I like your stressing of the wrong eye-colour and that this Jim's inner sun felt "wiser". I actually feel that Abram's Kirk has a great potential of character development besides - of course - a pair of stunning eyes.

I like this story, it's tender and positive.

Reviewer: cowgirl dressage Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/19/2013 1:48 AM Title: Chapter 1

I love your ideas, your dialogue and pacing.  but I have to suggest this needs to be beta'd.    The verb tenses and sentence structure make this hard going and detract from your very good approach.

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