Date: 03/24/2015 4:25 AM Title: Chapter 12
Truly brilliant writing here hon! Just wish there was more! ;o)
Awww. Thank you! I'm a tad busy with my other writing at the moment, if I get a breather I'll get back to this. (Don't be holding your breath though.... just a hint). My more current works are at www.jackbyrneauthor.com :)
Date: 09/13/2013 12:43 AM Title: Chapter 12
whoa, very nice. Sarek is going to mess this whole reunion up, isn't he?
I don't know what is going to happen with this one... Sarek is certainly misbehaving. But the muse has been choppy lately...
Date: 09/13/2013 12:17 AM Title: Chapter 8
Nice twist with the Romulan Commander. I admire how Spock can lie so easily without the kind of set up they had in the TOS episode. (I am assuming it's the same Commander, eh?) Very exciting!
Thank you. I think Canon has developed enough for us to realise Spock is quite capable of lying on demand....
Date: 09/11/2013 5:54 PM Title: Chapter 12
Spock is save. Good.
But what have Sarek in his mind?
Do I want to know?
Sarek finally lost his mind when he heard Spock died, and wants revenge on the Romulans. You may not have wanted to know that.
Thank you for the review :)
Date: 09/11/2013 3:34 PM Title: Chapter 12
Okay, I'm confused. I mean, I've read all twelve chapters eagerly and I think I understand what's going on but the thing with Jim and Admiral Kirk and Spock and Spock Prime and another Spock Prime and Sarek -- whew. I'm lost. I'll try rereading this at a later time and see if it was just a fluke that I didn't understand but this is a pretty good story otherwise. I think you're doing a good job anyway. I love the story, I'm just a tidbit lost. Just thought I should tell you.
LOL okay, brief class in Time Travel according to Fugitive (trust me, I make shit up): The Guardian of Forever guards a time portal, right? And in order to protect the timeline, the Guardian must be able to prevent time paradoxes from happening. One handy way (possibly the only one) to prevent a time paradox, is to create an alternative timeline and preserve it. So that's what the Guardian does. Also, in order to preotect itself from time paradoxes, i.e. someone going back in time and preventing the Guardian from being created, the Guardian has to have control over such things in its immediate vicinity. This creates a sort of Guardian precinct around the actualy portal where things are controlled by the Guardian. If you read the story with that in mind, it all becomes crystal clear, right?
And thank you for the review and the feedback, much appreciated!
Date: 12/30/2012 3:47 PM Title: Chapter 11
What a bad last paragraph! I cant lose the image of a rocking cartoon shuttle craft from my brain and the though leads to foolish giggles which need suppeessing as my non shipping family would never understand.
LOL Admiral Kirk is indeed bad throughout this story! Good for you, practising your Vulcan suppression techniques at home!
Date: 10/30/2012 2:55 AM Title: Chapter 10
I was so sad
BUT NOW I AM PUNCHING THE AIR!
I KNEW YOU WOULDN'T DO THAT TO SPOCK!
I would never never do that without a major character death warning! Neverrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr! And Spock is not so much a major character, as, like, well, one of the two only characters, in their universe, that is (not counting alternative selves.... yeeesh, this gets confusing!).
Thanks for reviewing. I am sitting on the next chapter because I don't like it. I think it is going to be one of those that I just write an entirely different chapter from scratch.
Date: 10/28/2012 10:16 PM Title: Chapter 10
I know, I know.... dark clouds in the background - Sarek is on his way to the romulans and the enterprise too... ok that would not be funny, but now in this moment. - It is.
LOL I see your point. Thanks.